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If I Lose You

If I lose you, I think I'll die
My soul will leave me again

If I lose you, it's all my fault
My heart will bleed and blacken

If I lose you, I'll cry an ocean
And drown in all of my tears

If I lose you, my fears will return
And darkness will consume me

If I lose you, it will cut me
And that wound will never heal

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Written July 26th, 2004

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  • vikingligrveldi
    December 26, 2004
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    excellent

    "If I lose you, it will cut me
    And that wound will never heal"

    Those are my favourite lines. I think this poem was very well done. It's very deep with lots of emotion. I could really feel everything this poem evokes. Wonderful job!

  • December 23, 2004
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    Hi. I think i like this one. Actually, i like it a lot. But i know that i could never feel that way because love hates me. Anyway, this was a great write as usual. Keep up the good work.
    ~Draconia.
    Edited on Dec 23, 3:53 p.m. because ''.

  • Xxxxxxxxx
    December 23, 2004
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    this is definiltly from the heart.beautiful

    yeah this says it perfectly clear.
    i dont know what to say,but it is great...
    if i had some one next to me,this is how i would feel.
    -cheers