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Alive

The broken organ keys
Drum in the distance,
My mind sits waiting,
Anxiously,
For me to wake up
And jump back in,
I want to go back to high school,
I want to walk those halls
And laugh again,
WAKE UP!
My brain yells every night
When I'm laying in
An unfamiliar bed
Where in the distance every night
You can hear the kids across the hall
Screaming their lungs out
I am not one of them,
Not anymore,
I'm not like the lunatics
That roam these starchy halls
Shaking and drooling,
No, I want to go back now
Ollie Ollie oxenfree!
I'm ready to be found,
I want to wake up at noon
Every Saturday morning
Only to watch cartoons
With my little brother
And pretend we're both 8 again
I'M OKAY NOW
Let me out and I'll be a good boy,
I know I AM good,
Not a monster,
Never was,
I'm ready,
I'm ready,
I've woken up,
Now let me be
Normal for once
Let me smile again
Let me out.

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poem to me counciler
Written December 22nd, 2004

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  • For I Have Sinned
    June 25, 2005
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    Wow... this is beautiful... amazing.
    Wow.


  • miseryzcompany
    April 10, 2005
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    i love this poem! u seem like such an awesome writter! ..i dont fully understand ur whole situation whether its u in the hospital..or ur brother..but id love to! u both seem really sweet and genuinly GREAT people..id love to tlk more to you..and read alot more of ur poetry!


  • GhostPrincess
    February 22, 2005
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    Oh what a beautiful write. I am sitting here saying "oh thank god he's okay". I don't even know you. But after reading some of your stuff, I am glad you are okay. Keep writing, but you can also write about the good things now that are happening to you. Maybe it will help others who are also yelling out for someone to notice and listen to them. I'm really glad that you are okay, and that you are back. Your last comment said that you were not going to write anymore. I personally think you should. You have such a talent. To through it away. Keep writing. write about feelings you have now. Write about your struggle and how you are "okay" now. I am going to add you to my favorites. Your poetry is awasome. Keep it up please. Tina.


  • AnnaJayne silver member
    February 4, 2005
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    great!!!!

    Awww hun! this is such a great poem, its beautifully written! i love it!

  • Acadia
    January 22, 2005
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    This is awesome and I love it!!!!!!!!!!
    ~Acadia~


  • Empathy-eyes
    January 20, 2005
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    Excellent

    Amazingly beautiful piece, penned with sheer devotion to every emotion expressed. This poem shows how much you've grown as a person, and the longing to be free again. I hope you're doing okay, I send you so much hope and love.

    Kate


  • Oleander
    January 9, 2005
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    Wow. I am amazed. This was what I was feeling and thinking when I was in the hospital. I'm sorry you have to go through this. You don't deserve any suffering.


  • Fantine
    January 3, 2005
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    This poem shows real emotion. Your frustrations and longing for "normalcy" ring loud. I hope you are feeling much better!


  • Blackened Halo
    December 31, 2004
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    Sorry, I haven't gotten to leave a message in awhile, by the way how are you? I read this poem early and it really touched me, its just so real, so down to earth. I hope your counsellor read this, and I hope your home soon.


  • December 23, 2004
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    So heart-breaking.
    Absolutely lovely. You are one of the few poets on this site who truly has a gift..a gift that lures someone in to reading whatever it is you have to say. It's beautiful and amazing.
    In all honesty, your poetry is worth every word..please keep writing.


  • gothchyld
    December 23, 2004
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    This is absolutely mesmerizing, I am so impressed, it is like a revealation of truth and that even though I don't know you well, I am glad that you have the courage to tell everyone you come out of your shell.


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    December 22, 2004
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    Oh wow darling this is so amazingly brilliant! I read it and I am so impressed. I know that you're not crazy and that you have come out of your shell. And I'm so glad that you know that you're not a monster, and that you realise you never were. If you read my story then you'll see that I can say that you're a monster, cause I know what real monsters look like
    You're so brave sweetheart and I admire you

  • Muted Delirium
    December 22, 2004
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    DUDE!! This poem is awesome. I like this one a lot better than your other ones - I don't know why, it just seems like it's easier to understand this. It's like, in the poem, you say how okay you are, and it may be true, but apparently you cannot escape just yet. Anyways, great work. Keep getting better

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