Carve a heart into my soul
Carve my skin, carve my chest
Carve my mind, make me whole
Carve a purpose into my breast
Carve my skin into a piece of art
Carve with a bloody blade
Carve a heart inside my body
A new heart I need made
Carve my soul forever more
Cleanse me of my dark
Carve me, let me bleed
Give life to my black heart
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Don't cut. Seriously. Ever.
Written December 21st, 2004
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Your words just draw me in. Maybe it's because I'm in a funky mood, but it's intense. Intense poetry is wonderful. It shows that you're in touch with yourself and that you know that writing will make you feel better instead of reaching for that stupid piece of metal.
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Despair is such a powerful emotion, when mixed with others it's just... I don't know... this is amazingly written it really speaks. Well done, you are so talented. xxx
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Very nice.
Seems an accurate portrayal of some common reasons of self-harm (specifically, cutting. Love the warning at the end. Although, I think the only one who would look for poems like this are already cutting. Like me. Ah, well. -
So much deep despair and intense emotion... makes me sad to think of you.. or anyone in this real frame of mind... a person who is actually in this kind of pain... it kills me.
I had to read this over again because I thought the word was crave... I'M LAME.
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This was me as a cutter. Heh.
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nice and simple, liked it alot
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Thank you.
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So much emotion and pain are slipped into your words. Very amazing peice of art.
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad oyou found this to your liking.
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"Carve me, let me bleed
Give life to my black heart"
wow! i loved this! superb! i loved the subtle rhyme too, and the passion and emotion were sooo there, so real! well done! x x x -
Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. It is one of my favorites.
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Excellent!
Quite a powerful poem with a good rhyme and background. I like the way this is shaped...as though each stanza is carved very skillfully. I liked this line alot and felt it's power packed:
"Carve a purpose into my breast"
The last two lines are excellent as well.
Great work!
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Thank you for your comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Good luck with judging.
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Awesome!!!
i love that and can relate to that in so many ways!!!
Thanx for entering my contest!!!! -
1 and 8/10ths thumbs up
The way you well i can't explain to you what im feeling from this poem but its a good thing! -
i liked this a lot. it was very very meaningful, and beautfully written. im gonna go read more from you now! kep up the good work
hehe.. -Megan
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