The touch of dew-kissed grass on running feet,
As warming sun's rays spill across my face.
This day of dreams now makes me feel complete,
As air and sun and sky all interlace
To form a dome of blue above my world,
Surrounding me with more than I can bear.
The realm of beauty now regales, unfurled,
And I, enthralled, can only stand and stare.
Immensity o'erwhelms my meager soul
And swallows up all words that I compose,
In playing out its never ending role
By teasing us with things it won't disclose.
Creation now surrounds me, without flaw,
And I, a star-struck mortal, watch, in awe.
Author notes
Was just thinking when I was outside in the crisp and very clear day, and then later that night, looking around and particularly up.
Written December 22nd, 2004
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I don't need to say anything because you already know it but AP won't let me applaud unless I type words, so here are words:
MARK MY WORDS ONE OF THESE DAYS!
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Very good piece, full of imagery. The rhyming in this is dead on. I loved the ending, it really ties it all togther. The picture also fits very nicely. Amazing write and I'm deff looking forward to read some more.
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Amazing, I like these sonnets, they flow so beautifully...I'm a big fan of them, and you do them so well. Another beautifully woven piece you've penned from your imagery within.
Thanks for sharing Paul, much love, Timothy ~
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I am enthralled. Can only read and gasp! This is a wonderful poem. And you created a lovely background for it. It's the second poem I've read tonight that has pictures of planets for background. You should go and look at Mission to Mars by wbiro.
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excellent
this is wonderful, i love it. you have totally expressed the feeling of being hit by the sudden impact of nature's beauty. This is how it hits you, you become awestruck and realise how insignificant you are in the context of the universe. well done! -
A beautiful, awe inspiring poem, Paul
You've brought vivid imagery to life with this contemplative, well written piece.
And the picture with it is perfect.
I think this is the first I've read of your work and I'm very impressed I'll certainly be reading more.
Dee
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Yes. A very good sonnet indeed. I've decided I like your poetry. It's a bit old fashioned but you make seem still in style.
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This is beautiful, I have just begun trying to write and understand the form of sonnets, they are a little difficult lol, however you made it look effortless. Great Write
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Good job.
I really like this one. I was not all that crazy about o'erwhelmed but other than that, it's a great write. I did use one of those archaic word forms in a poem recently, "Where Blow The Winds Of War", but in general I avoid them like the plague. I was tired when I wrote that one, and had a deadline, as it was to go up on the front page of Grandmothers Against War back in 2001 when we were afraid Bush was going to start something crazy (which he subsequently did). Normally I would never use archaic forms and haven't since. Anyway, this is a good poem, and maybe even better than that.
Jim Dunlap
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this is absolutley wonderful Paul...i have had that feeling many of times and it is during those moments when it is hardest for me to understand how ppl dont believe in God ...i just dont believe things could just fall in to place some beautifully by chance...beautiful as usual...God Bless
tyler -
Great
Once again grampa youve blown me away. I read this when you emailed it to me and I liked it ever since. You make me so proud your word usage and the flow and just everything about this poem makes me step back and say whoa. Amazing job Im very proud of you.
Malzy -
Nicely done sonnet! I especially liked the line "By teasing us with things it won't disclose." My one suggestion would have been to balance the praise of creation with its "AWEfulness." The world can be a beautiful and scary place with raging hurricanes, volcanoes, etc.. I tend to have a love-hate relationship with them. They fascinate me even as I dread the damage they cause.
Isn't the snow beautiful this morning! We'll have a white Christmas for sure.
Jennifer -
this is definitely, in my opinion, one of the best I have read by you.
utter perfection in sonnets, I'd say.
well done.
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"Creation now surrrouds me, without flaw,
And I, a star-struck mortal, watch, in awe."
I love this last sentence, Paul. Your poem is beautifully written and very inspirational. I enjoyed it very much. Hugs, Patricia -
Excellent!
This was such a pleasure to read..a celebration of life!
Happy Holidays!
Maureen
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I like this a lot even though I have no expriences with sonnets! But its good! Its still cool to read! Another good one, Paul
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captivating words and powerful imagery.this is a poem of tranquility.it makes you glad to be alive.you realize how insignificant you are in the realm of nature.
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Hey You,
Your sonnets are always so well done.. very impressive. Hopefully someday I'll write one of my own.. it's a totally different writing style than what I'm used to, but I like it.. and I've seen a great success rate from you
I love the graphic too.. really adds a lot to the poem. Great work yet again!
Becca
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