Red and wet, he’s clothed
in fetal attire
will-free of virginal mind,
Unblemished , roped in
tranquil veins
heart
white as snow
Reasoned in superfluity.
and presence always
questioned-
Life.
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~~~~~~~ and our Saviour.......included.
Written December 21st, 2004
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ahhhh. it's always refreshing to read you and see something in a new life. loved your description of womb-life and the heart of life in essential, minimalist terms.
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How well you captured this Cookie, its clarity unquestioned. Saying anything more would have been less detailed. This is by far my favorite of yours.
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very interesting. luv how it has so many layers and could mean a lot of different things. and how the title isnt just flung on, but really holds meaning.
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Great!
a reall pleasure reading this one. Short by viewpoint, but such a lot going on inside. Marvelous! -
This would be a good salutation to include in a Christmas Card I am thinking. It is so eloquently written, simple, precise and loaded with truth. I think you are in a class by yourself. Look forward to reading more of your work.
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...wow... you're good!
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Oh, sister! You gave it all away, and I'm so very glad. It takes the other side to reveal the.......................OTHER....side! ahem.
You have seeked the pragmatics and won my heart in the words that could only come from the reader. Know that?
Thank you.
Glad to see that you are in a transition...and on your way back to things that pleasure you. I, too, wasn't as involved due to the year 'after' my Daddy passed on. I don't mind helping where I'm qualified.
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Awesome, must read!
Wonderful presentation, Cookie! What appears on the surface to be simple is found to be complex. I was left with the images and impressions of the following: 1) The birth of Our Savior Jesus Christ.2) Mixed reception from the fallen world. 3) How precious His birth, life, death and resurrection. 4) Left with the feeling you were also speaking of all life. Life with and without knowing Jesus. How valueable each human life is intended to be. I suppose, depending where our thoughts are going; we may draw many meanings from your poem. I always enjoy your writing. You leave me with alot to think about.(I consider that a good thing! If, I cease to use this brain, it will dry rot!) Your author's page was informative, humorous, entertaining, colorful and creative. Truly unique! Just as you are, Di! Thanks for sharing with me! I pray the New Year bring all the Best to you and your family! I pray a healthier year here. I wasn't online much at all in 04. God willing 2005 will be a different course! Is the picture of your precious granddaughter? By the way, use number 2 when checking my new writngs. I Hope to improve as I go along??? Typos are still a problem! Have a new pc prgm. to speak and prgm. will type. Haven't set it up yet. Hope to be able to pursue my short stories with this assistance.
keda
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Hi there! Thank you for your interest.
This is a layered subject about the child who's not expected...not invited into the world;I trouble to define that anything that is in the womb, stirring, has to define nothing less that 'life' itself. Contraversial in today's pro-choice/abortion issues.
It also is a view of the Christ child; how He was expected in the historical sense (prophecy of the Messiah), but rejected by His very own people once entering the world reality.
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I love the work, but I was curious as to the title... how did that come to relate to the actual poem itself?
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This is a great poem. I like the way you choose your words and I enjoyed reading your poem. It's short, deep and powerful.
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Sent from above
Also, I would like to thank you for giving all the glory to our Lord
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Elegant... complex yet simply excelent. I have no words to even try to express your creativity and technique. The best thing to write about is the one that we all should be deeply in love with. -
Divine
Dearest Dianne
Always virtuosity, exquisiteness, the intriguing ... wonderful opposition of mortality and Holy Immortality ... Of acceptance and rejection ...
Perfect.
Myra -
Hi! Thank you. This one goes in my layered groupings, as do many of mine. It will be under layers as well.
That is due to being occupied by the Holy Spirit: Thank you, brother! Warmly, CookieZeal
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mmm a warm read . Made to my likings quite nicely! As always
. A gentle picture if that will do it justice.
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wonderful. the image of purity was probably rhw most powerful to me, and this was a great write. very good flow and depth. i believe that this was written about the birth of a new baby, and it was a beautiful tribute to an awesome miracle. amazing work. -cate
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this is amazing and full of depth.
I think you say alot in so few words.
I think this is about how God or Christ is unwelcome and questioned in so many people's lives, but I also think there may be another meaning here that I am not getting.
either way, this is well done.
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wow this is written about the birth of a new baby or it is way over my head, LOL.
Merry Christmas to you dear
Tamara
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great
great choise of words, really flows great. Keep up the great work. I this its great how at the end you relate everything to life. Beautiful. Simply Beautiful
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