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"As I Struggle to Survive"

Missing image

As menacing, jointed limbs

and a horrifying segmented body

emerge

in a noble array of weaponry,

the vast assemblage

surrounding and encircleing,

there is awakened such a terror,

hindering any movement

toward escape...

`

It arrives at an arrogant assumption

that I will not bolt,

its crafts and skills

artfully honed and cunning,

its substances of chicanery

imbued with a craving desire

for mastery and power,

unaffected by my simple expression

of fear

or my prospect of retreat,

its rough, uneven bitterness

corrosive and invasive...

`

Before I yield to its onslaught,

I gather my vindication

and affirm my defenses-

asserting my position

in a declaration of unremitting audacity

with startling engagement,

emboldened with a deep sanctuary

of ingenious intelligence

combined with robust savagery,

born of accomplished undertakings

and reflective study;

`

and with a watchfulness, and mindfulness

the stalemate begins-

there ensues a deadly courtship

with subtle displays

of enticements

and witchery,

fearless effrontery

and portents of majesty,

dignified, imposing;

and omens of solemn grandeur -

relentless, uncorrupted,

and severe;

` 

In pure dominion and supremacy

I ascend in a punishing retaliation

that was dodged

with knowing intimidation

and in awesome enormity; 

I recover from my bungling charge

and I withdraw,

plucking new resolution

from a firmness of heart,

and with a naked excess I attack again

and maul it’s venomous,

fierce mandibles,

and tame the foul beast...

Then I awoke.

I was struck

with sudden trepidation

from slanting directions

toward a sticky,

thick, blackish,

suffocating hallucination of defeat,

deadly and calamitous,

sustained by ineffectual illuminations

of the contest,

a prisoner of this cruel brutality of life, 

painfully swelling

my own cruelty

as I live and struggle to survive.

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or, "An Encounter With an Itty Bitty Spider..."

Written September 21st, 2004

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  • malkinpuss
    February 28, 2005
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    Outstanding

    Very awesome indeed! I too loved the vocabulary and I especially liked how it fit in with the modernistic science fiction vibe of this write. A stark and scarily sterile fear...immense images.


  • wbiro gold member
    February 28, 2005
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    Well, thank you DarkRose! This was an early piece, and after many tinkerings I though I'd give it another chance. So look back in your dustbin of writings and see if there isn't one just waiting to be polished up a bit and entered again!


  • Allyson Michelle
    February 28, 2005
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    WOW. This is the best piece I have read of yours. It's imagery and words are absolutely stunning. Just hte way you wroded this whole piecec is equisite. I love how the piece transitions. It raelly makes the reader think and ponder the outcome of it all. Great job. You have amazed me with your talent...incredible.


  • wbiro gold member
    February 28, 2005
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    Well, thank you! Yes, a lot of what we write gets passed by! I'm sure you have some good writing that needs attention...


  • February 28, 2005
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    Very well done. I'm suprised no one has applauded this yet. The vocabulary is profound and the images are infinately awesome. Very great write indeed. You have a talent, which i'm sure you know. I would love to read other works of yours, and look forward to doing so in the future.
    Edited on Feb 28, 4:44 p.m. because ''.


  • December 21, 2004
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    WOW

    WOW!!!! Incredible.....Such a powerful piece....Full of great images in my head ....Good write ...

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