FOREVER INTO THE DISTANT BLUE
(T. Beechey)
Amidst the boundless astral plain,amongst the myriad drops of rain
Between the moon and sun I've danced in a ceaseless quest to seek romance
But I just had to turn to find that what I sought was right behind
To take my hand and guide me through...forever into the distant blue
Within her eyes,therein lies what shade and shadow can't disguise
All that is so pure and true,like when the dawn embarks anew
Spilling forth in lustrous rays,sifting through the mist and haze
Allowing for another chance to glimpse the world at flawless glance
And the images which have been drawn supply the strength to carry on
Over once untrodden ground as time's fabric grows unwound
Hers is truly a lyrical soul - lifting me up,filling the role
Of someone whom I used to know...it seems so very long ago
But also yet,in a way,there remains a sense of yesterday
For but a fleeting twinkling once,I relished the flavors of these wants
I savored every precious drop then,all too soon,it came to stop
Ever since I've longed and yearned for those moments to return
To cast aside shrouds of gloom and breathe in airs of sweet perfume
Nestled in rich bouquets of water lilies by the bay
Simple pleasures,priceless treasures,springing forth in spacious measures
Gone not to be revised...till I found the beauty in her eyes
Reviving faith,renewing hope,smoothing out each hill and slope
Granting chance to chances lost regardless of the cause or cost
A time to bask within the rays of playful,carefree summer days
And capture at their greatest heights passions borne on winter heights
Revealed to all,concealed to none --- the time to heal has begun
And I never thought I would see when such a time would come to me
I'm comforted so by its warming glow,more than anyone could ever know
Casting reflections below,above,and all around in hues of love
Now,as anguish goes,I've chance to dose --- at last,a moment for repose
For I've grown weary in my quest,my wounded soul beckons request
The mirrored portraits in her eyes reflect upon the earth and skies
Across the glass I faintly trace a misplaced smile upon my face
When I awake,I've come to see those dreams of smiles have come to be
For,within my heart,we're as one in the presence of the setting sun
Underneath a velvet mystic sky as cloudedmists go rolling by
Upon a crystalled span of sea awash in sheer tranquilty
And,all around,there is no sound --- not even an echoed whisper found
Just she and I within a world so unbridled and unfurled
Her poetic gaze I praise in song as,with the winds,we drift along
Past and beyond the skyline view...forever into the distant blue
Author notes
Option #4
Written December 21st, 2004
A contest entry
- OH BABY! by Brain Fetus.
612 points, ended March 24, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lyricists and Songwriters!! by Andy Stephenson.
800 points, ended May 12, 2007, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'd Give Up Forever To Touch You by PastelMoons.
1000 points, ended January 20, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Remarkable write
full of passion's delight
Thank you so much for
entering my contest
~Pastel
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Amazing! Great rhyme and flow
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Simply sweet ...
and well-constructed poem that deserves more attention. You have shared the secrets of the soul that relish the feelings of love and gain strength from them. Very enjoyable read and just the right length for me. joy
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you carry us into the distant blue with all hues of love....sometimes with a misplaced smile too...
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Hmmm. =)
This was really good
I like how it flowed
And how it rhymed in the lines
I think my favorite stanza was:
Within her eyes,therein lies what shade and shadow can't disguise
All that is so pure and true,like when the dawn embarks anew
Spilling forth in lustrous rays,sifting through the mist and haze
Allowing for another chance to glimpse the world at flawless glance
And the images which have been drawn supply the strength to carry on
Over once untrodden ground as time's fabric grows unwound
Hers is truly a lyrical soul - lifting me up,filling the role
Of someone whom I used to know...it seems so very long ago
Wow that's really long =/ well sorry =)
Great work!
Thanks for entering my contest
Good Luck!
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Your poetry flows across my mind so well, it's almost like a drug!!!! Awesome thoughts in the way you have gracefully put them together genuinely!!!!
Take care,
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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I need the option # for this contest
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A very well written piece I enjoyed reading it very much.
Thank you for entering the contest.
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Thanks
There is interesting and unusual rhyme in these lyrics. Do you have a melody to this? Thanks for entering my contest. I really appreciate it.
Andy
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Beautiful
WOW very very nice ... it flowed well and was well written .. Thank you for the entry..
Jackie
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This is so beautiful. It's like youv'e created a heaven on earth through your imagery and colored with true love.
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WOW...I'm actually speechless after that comment --- I thank you from the bottom of my heart and the depth of my soul
Tom
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FANTASTIC....
This is a very well penned piece, full of dedication to a loved one. carries so many messages of the desire to remain for ever as one. great entry, well done.
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This piece is almost flawless. Beautifully written, perfect rhyme, and gentle flow. Good luck to you in the contest. Patricia
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It's a wonderful poem, though long, it was well worth the read. But, however, I regret to inform you that you will again be disqualified from a contest. My rules weren't as clearly stated as those of voodoowolf's, but one of the guides for writing each poem was "short". You perfected the sweet part, and your rhyming was the best I have seen yet, but I'm afraid I cannot judge you any further for this contest.
I am sorry. But I love your poem, and I am sure the girl it was written for was speechless upon reading it.
Thank you for entering the contest, it was a wonderful read.
again, I'm sorry.
Keep writing.
they'll keep reading.
forever.
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this is a good poem i like it a lot!!! Good luck!
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wow
wow....... thats all i can say.. its great even better, im ata loss 4 words, well done
good luck
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As Ayisan has mentioned it does exeed the required lines...I truly hope you edit in time to become a valid entry before closing...I find the word play remarkable and greatly penned with perfect internal rhyming...there is so much to read, I had to read a couple of times to enjoy all of it's romantic content...all the best...~Lilac~
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one of the rules clearly states you cannot exceed 25-30 lines and you went far beyond that so you have the option of dropping two stanzas or somehow make half of one of those two last stanza apart of the third stanza from the bottom; plz correct this before judging
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Good
Truely Remarkable! Very romantic and amazingly beautiful! Its well written, although I wasn't sure at start what to think about this piece. Now I am thankful I read all the way through. its a great piece with alot of emotion and depth. Good luck with the contest
Best regards,
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Trivking64. Please read and follow the rules and have a great write in my contest.
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Utterly Amazing
This poem was amazingly beautiful and I'm certain I haven't begun to pick up yet on all it had to say. It was so deep as you spoke of searching for just that simple long forgotten pleasure that could heal your wounded soul. That friend you forgot when you went off, hurting yourself on a quest that apparently did not make you content. That friend you dance away with is a dreamer's gaze such as mind and in the hearts of few does the moon dance as gracefully as it seems to dwell inside a mind of yours and along with the stars and all their being within mine. -
wow, i really felt the emotion in this poem. It was so deep i loved it so much bravo
isis
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Omgsh, i love the rhyming, its so smoothe and all flows! And the emotions are wonderful, it's very adorable. Great write, and best of luck with gettin this published..you're on your way!
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Capturing poem
Even though long, very capturing, loved every part of it, nice, romantic... -
Long, but so worth the time it takes to read. I thought it was beautiful and romantic and read very smoothly.
I admire your use of vocabulary and my favourite lines would have to be:
The mirrored portraits in her eyes reflect upon the earth and skies
Across the glass I fanitly trace a misplaced smile upon my face.
Beautiful. Good luck in the contest!
~Nixx <33
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Yhis is a monumental piece of work,keep writing you have a great ability to paint pictures with words,Rob
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This is absolutely enchanting and romantic. Your rhyme is smooth as a river. Awesome write. I can't rhyme to save my soul yet I appreciate someone that can. Good luck with the contest, this is a winner in my book.
Red
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