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I'm broken on the inside

I'm broken on the inside
My heart hurts
Crying on the inside
Crying out for you
I miss you so much
I cant stand this.
I cant stand not having you next to me in the morning
Not having your kisses
Not smelling your cologne when I hug you
Why did you have to go away?
Why did you have to leave me?
Why did God take you away?
Baby, I love you.
I miss you
I wish you were here...
I cant stop looking at your photographs.
I wish I could hold you
Tell you how much I love you.
But you're gone.
I wish I could have taken your pain.
I fear not having you.

But, I'm broken on the inside.

Author notes

This is crappy, I couldnt think of a way to end it. Still working on it. I cant write how I am feeling into words. If you want to read a better poem, that has to do with the same thing, read 'the day i regret' Please give me feed back.
Written December 20th, 2004

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  • haili
    December 23, 2004
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    this is the second poem i have read by you and i dont see anything crappy about it i like the way you write. i think your a great writer


  • YourMomWritesPoetry
    December 22, 2004
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    this was really good. I can relate and it's very well written. Great write and keep up the good work.
    ~Frankee

  • Living Passion
    December 22, 2004
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    Aww, this was very sad. Well written. I enjoyed it. Nice job!
    ~Stefani~

  • SouthernPoet
    December 21, 2004
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    Nice write. Sometimes love hurts, as there are some things in life that we cannot change. It was well presented, and flowed
    well. Great job...keep up the execelant writing...Steven

  • JuneBug
    December 21, 2004
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    Touching

    I really feel for you. I'm missing someone too, but in a different way, I think. In the poem you seem to allude to the potential...um...deceasedness of the person you are missing, but I'm not sure if I'm reading that right. Still, I like it.


  • December 20, 2004
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    its so heart breaking to have so much tragedy, but it's also brave when you write with such beauty. well done

  • Fry
    December 20, 2004
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    i understand your pain. ive felt loss in such a way as well. im sorry that this happened to you. no, this is not crappy. its heartfelt and beautiful. i believe the first draft is always the best. keep writing!


  • LaAmyaArlene
    December 20, 2004
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    Im so sorry. I know how it feels to wish someone was next to you. To depend on that person, to keep you alive, and have them gone. It hurts. Great write, keep up the good work, and keep letting your emotions flow

    LaLa

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