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Downward We Drip

 to read this, either get a dictionary,
 or be content with vague images-
 it is the latter that this is best read by...
 but the former isn't bad, either...
































 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
  
  
  
  
  
  
  
  
  
   
   
   
   
   
   
   
   
   
    
    
    
    
    
    
    
    
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
      
      
      
      
      
      
      
      
       
        

            
            
            
            
            
            
            
                
                
                
                
                
                
                
                
                
                  
                  
                  
                       
                       
                       
                       
                       
                          
                           
                            
                             
                              
                               
                                 
                                       
                                        
                                            

  


  



  



  

  
    
        
               
    Downward we drip    

 

    Derelict in this desert    

    Surrendering to the disgrace    

     And shame of confusion    

     To allay our decline    

     Or retrench or resign   

     To remove from our belly    

     This wandering illusion    

                                      
                
          
     
   


  




   








  
    
        
               

    To sustain the remission    

    Reservation, suppression,    

    Of the loathing, the horrifying    

    Sojourn in we;    

    With the enshrining gift    

    Of beggardly abjection-    

    Abandoned, discarded    

    Withdrawn, rejected.    

                
        
    
  








   

 








  
    
        
               

    This lack and privation    

    Abstracted and lost    

    Ideally and complete    

    In supreme liberation;    

    Governed indelibly    

    With iron-bound irony    

    In barren, infertile    

    Sentiments of faith    

    Unrendered,    

    Denuded, untested    

    Disconnected.    

                
        
    
  


 







  










  
    
        
               

    Please    

    Pardon this discharge    

    Of caustic petulance,    

    Of sarcastic harshness,    

    This venomous rancor;    

    This abyss the scholar    

    Will hasten me from,    

    With inflection on gaining    

    A long tempered embrace    

    From your welcome.    

                
        
    
  






 


   











  
    
        
                
  
 

    See    

    This performance is enacted    

    In industrious ebullience    

    Reflecting on fountains    

    Of sensual persuasion    

    Positive, complete,    

    In subtle releases,    

    Nevertheless yielding    

    To counterfeit engagements    

    Of vigorous, tangible,    

    Acute penetration.    

                
        
    
  










   










  
    
        
                
  
 

    How distressing to accommodate    

    This telling solicitation.    

                
        
    
  

 






 

   



 






 
   
    
        
                
 

    Pray   

    Forgive my imbibing    

    Devouring engrossment    

    While I refrain from moderation    

    And avoid self-restraint;    

    And pilfer our dreams    

    And muse the Obscene    

    In hidden, indefinite    

    Nonsensical fancies    

    Of largeness, opulence,    

    Riches, and wealth;    

    When lampooning the insulting    

    With misused perversions    

    And deceiving the reviling    

    Bulwark of Profane    

    Is the rule.    

                
        
    
  








 

  






 




   
    
        
                
 
 

    ‘Tis    

        Sufficient to mention    

    By name this crass imitation    

    Of art’s application    

    And it’s clinging, sticking,    

    Glutinous fat    

    Of adjoining dependence    

    On lovers and friends.    

                 
        
    
  






 


   

 









  
    
        
               

    Know    

    The bitterness of this    

    we must realize    

    Is pungent and sharp    

    But is drawn to a climax    

    Of enlightened perception    

    With the temporary appearance    

    Of said lovers and friends;    

    Endured by the mighty    

    Baptism of love    

    With eccentric abnormity    

    Born in the dwellings    

    Of suppressed obliteration    

    And subdued disintegration.     

                
        
    
  











   








   

 
   
     
        
                
 

    Aye    

    Beware the accursed abhorrence    

    To native failures-    

    Defiling, tormenting,    

    Cursed, evil;    

    Use this primeval    

    Futile, useless exuberance    

    Encircling the aforementioned    

    Transposer of friction   

    To epitomize the expansive void    

    Of our craggy, broken, jagged    

    Candid and tragic    

    Nonappearance’s elsewhere.    

                
        
    
  









   











 
  
    
        
               

    Hold    

    A significant audience    

    With the additional aspect    

    Of calamity modified by casual cheer,    

    In the accustomed, familiar,    

    Habitual season    

    Of harmonization and pacification;    

    Revealing the appendage    

    Of the consummate skillful    

    Attainment of agreement    

    Symphonious    

    With repute and affection.    


                
        
    
  

   
  





   








  
    
   
     

         

 Armed
     with this importance,    

    Yet answerable to the aggregate    

    Collection of points    

    On one single spot    

    Of our sourness.    

    So    

                
        
    
  











   










  
    
        
                
   

   I caution with counsel    

    The youth of the Father    

    To maintain an honor    

    With beauty and grace    

    To a ripe old age    

   Of deterioration.    

                
        
    
  
  



 


 




   





 




 
  
    
        
               

    Stay    

    Here I rein in    

    This scheming narration    

    In the flowering struggle    

    Of self-determination    

    And the inevitable marching    

   In aimless directions-   
    Rearward, sideways,     

    Dripping downward at best-    

    Just one pointless indentation    

    On our nebulous lives.    

             

             

        
 






  




  


  





       disappearing       
                     
        
       


  




  




  




  dripping  






  





  

  





  










  falling  
          
       
    
  
 
 
 

                           
                      
                     
                    
                   
                  
                 
                
               
          

         
        
        
        
       
       
       
       
      
      
      
      
     
     
     
     
    
    
    
    
    
   
   
   
   
   
   
  
  
  
  
  
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 



 



 





 






 






Author notes

A testament to our falling, drifting years.

Favorite AP Poet to Read- Between Pinhead and Nicolette... I'll pick Nicolette, since I can also get into her romance (unlike Uncle Pin's!)
Written September 1st, 2004

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  • JustBe gold member
    December 7, 2005
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    Unless I am mistaken (which is a very real possibility), this is a cynical, quasi-nihilistic catalog of the various inescapable ironies and paradoxes that come with being alive. It is well written, with a consistent tone and flow, and the dripping effect suits it. Nevertheless, I have to confess that this one made my head spin a bit, because it is quite verbose. That was clearly part of the idea, I know, but this piece is abstract, and therefore requires interpretation. Interpretation was made much more difficult by the fact that I don’t have enough RAM to hold it all at the same time. In fairness, I have been treated for Attention Deficit Disorder for over 20 years. Also, I have been known to be a bit long-winded myself.

    I liked:
    “Forgive my imbibing/Devouring engrossment/While I refrain from moderation/And avoid self-restraint…”

    “With iron-bound irony/In barren, infertile/Sentiments of faith”

    the last verse.

    Suggestions:
    In “…Of adjoining dependence/On lovers and friends ./Know/The bitterness of this/we must realize/Is pungent and sharp/But is drawn to a climax/Of enlightened perception/With the temporary appearance/Of relatives and friends,” “friends” appears twice, and it stuck out a bit.

    In “Using this primeval/Futile, useless exuberance,” I think you should pitch an adjective.

    All in all, a good write. Unfortunately, I don’t feel I can really do it justice


  • kryspin
    December 2, 2005
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    excellent use of vocabulary and good use of layout to solidify the message


  • FallingSideways silver member
    October 30, 2005
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    I can see where your love for abstracts originally stemmed however this is something creatively expressed that gives one a lot to mull over.......
    I believe I will find this on my bookmark list
    ~Swt


  • wbiro gold member
    March 6, 2005
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    Thanks for hazarding the read and the constructive critique, jama! You got me to add a warning in the beginning! Maybe I'll add definitions at the end, like some of my other 'thesaurus' born abstractions!


  • iamaparadox
    March 6, 2005
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    This is a great poem but I have to agree with the others, no thesaurus next time! Sometimes it's just to much going on to get the idea.
    Your shortest lines are the swetest though, I love this one "To remove from our belly This wandering illusion"

    Great job but, in english next time!

  • wbiro gold member
    February 23, 2005
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    no dictionary- this was initiated with ye olde thesaurus- then injected with a little of life's experiences and slowly forged into something resembling a whole... topic? Yes, it weaves in and around the topic of a person's present state of being.


  • Mindless Insite
    February 23, 2005
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    thats pretty amazing... i really liked the format, but it seems like you overdid it quite a bit... far far too long winded for my taste, and it sounded like you didnt stay too much on topic... people that dont understand those words might not catch it, but you skipped thoughts quite a bit with very little transition... try something for me next time you write... put down the dictionary... lol... good work, thank you for entering, but its going to take more than 5 dollar words to appease me

  • wbiro gold member
    January 16, 2005
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    thanks- that would be 'thesaurus'! My secret- open thesaurus- go down page using words- see where poem is going- add a dash of personal experience- rewrite it many many times- reorganize stanzas from best to worse- and... it's still never done!


  • Scindr
    January 16, 2005
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    What a very intricate poem. You have a massive vocabulary [or a thesaurusous handy], because your word selection was impressive and dynamic. It was a longer poem, but nothing wrong with that, it was a true joy to read. Thank you for sharing it with us.


  • Crash Mayhem
    December 25, 2004
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    nicely done, very long, but nice

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