And so tis again that I fall into a crystal blue sea with oceans of human waste, devouring all that is within my cells of hope.
Though I swim again in search of what once was thought to be and sharking for the adders once again.
No mast was needed, for without a stern the ship did sink as I reached for the bottom of another journey complete.
Now once more I recall my white spirit and what she means to me and this is fate as she drowns me once again.
Why dear spirit doest thou torment me in these seas and oceans deep of something I cannot comprehend?
I stood at your lake, even laid upon your side in trust thou would never fade into the waters deep.
I did rest upon your breast for the comfort of a child and slept within your dreams for an enchanting life.
I allowed thee to hold mine heart in the very sacred part of your soul and still you found a way within my soul.
I knew as my soul unfolded I would surely have death to find my life and exhaust me of my last breath.
So once again do I dare another journey deep as nothing holds for me any longer in these seas?
Waves and billows with your swallowing desires, swallow mine heart, for a soul without is a lost soul indeed.
At my own fault I accept the oceans floor and allow the bubbles of my lungs to reach the waters crest.
For once again mine own heart deceives me as mine eyes become blind to the cruel ways of the world.
Hate and love are the same in the sand as I wonder how many grains are truly formed of the dried blood of allies and foes?
Author notes
This is the conclusion piece to my book "Sea of the White Spirit".
Written December 18th, 2004
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untammed soul - Thank you for such a wonderful comment. Poetry nonetheless - Poetry is of the soul as I see you quite understand in your name. It is a shame more can't see this quality or talent that is required of poetry. Send me an IM if you would and I would be glad to read your writing of HOPE. Thank you again for your comment and I will be looking for your IM.
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this is a great poem. it shows so much emotion. it is so great to know that there are so many great poets out there compared to the other poems i have read this is defintly one of the best. there is so much talent in it. if you have a chance please read one of my poems and return the favor. if you like happy poems i recomend "Hope", if you don't then any of the others will work lol. well you keep up all the great work. this was a really good poem. I'm glad i found it. have a great new year don't forget to spend it with someone you love.
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You got it exactly right and thank you for your comment and taking the time to read and re-read it. For the digetion of it, I am glad it took more than one look. This is the way I intended the piece as with the rest of the book to be. I must as well say, only a true poet would gather this much information from it as you have.
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I dunno...I took this to be a story of a man who once again took a chance on love, knowing what the outcome in the end might be. Sadly enough, he got burned again. I probably missed it here. None-the-less, this was a great, enjoyable read. I think I'll go back and reread it for the 3rd time. It's not something you can digest with just one chew, ya know?
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5.8/10
Creativity: Nice romance, but I feel that the archaicism is unnecessary. 7/10
Innovation: I liked the long lines. However, I'm not convinced your poetic voice is on display here. 6/10
Technique: I think you need something concrete to balance out the ambiance. 6/10
Readability: I was confused for most of the write. I simply didn't know what it was you were trying to express. 5/10
Emotionality: Like I said, it was very romantic. However, there lacked that one thing that would really connect with me. 5/10 -
princess dkness - If only my soul would speak more volumes maybe then would I see the beauty in what I do. A feeling of freedom is what I get, for my love in poetry continues bold as the love in my poetry begins waxing cold.
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FriendofMaglor - Thank you for reading, though how beautiful can feelings of despair be? Don't get me wrong I am glad you see the beauty, it is just a question for thought.
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Thank you Cless - One really does not know for sure how deep the oceans go when it comes to certain matters.
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when the soul speaks freely you can't help but listen. truly your words speak volumes. beautiful.
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deep and beautiful.... I love the imagery in this one
Now once more I recall my white spirit and what she means to me and this is fate as she drowns me once again.
Why dear spirit doest thou torment me in these seas and oceans deep of something I cannot comprehend?
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Very interesting, i like it. It seems really deep, as though your soul is revealed through your words
Keep up the good work, i'll read more of your work some time.
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