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Ink

You are
The scum in the water dish
No, that's too good for you
You are
The mould in my fridge
No, still to good
You are
The dog shit on my shoe.
That's better.
You are
The Scum of the Earth
Oh, it stings,
     does it?
I hope so
I have teeth too
I can bite
Sweet innocent me?
My face
   may be pale
But
My ink is dark -
My pen is poison
You know who you are

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Written December 18th, 2004

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  • thesilence
    March 22, 2005
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    fabulous

    awesome...i read it too my brother, you know real vengefully...haha...really good, it is always better to get out your anger like this, i love the title and
    "I can bite
    Sweet innocent me?
    My face
       may be pale
    But
    My ink is dark -
    My pen is poison
    You know who you are "
    absolutely great!!! so much emotion

  • poetgirl43322
    March 1, 2005
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    wow girl....this is one of the best i have read in a lifetime...i love what you did with the last few lines...oh my goodness...i'm so blown away...nice work


  • avertediyes
    December 22, 2004
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    wow, how intimidating. lol, you certainly scared the shit out of me *runs our of room*
    ~avertediyes


  • Xx Alice xX
    December 21, 2004
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    Get it all out, pen your anger. Don't hide it, it will only hurt you then.


  • xSarahx
    December 19, 2004
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    Bwahahah. Nice poem. I liked the dark, hateful attitude in this. Keep on writing! Awesome job.
    -Sarah-

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