Monarchy of metal -double the pain
I'm twisted in this full metal jacket
as i dance about over rusty blades and broken glass
A test before the mile to sample
Secular damage and blades I tamper
No rusty knives for this tale so grim
If I kill myself, I’ll never win
Instead of my own nasty blood drenched suicide-
I’ll spin this onto you - and assist yours
“I’d die for you” echoed in my head
Because brains I lacked back then
Unfortunately I won’t die for you-
What a waste of my time!
Let me cut you up in spite
I’ll grab your wrists
Slice them tight and circulationless
Lick it dry and call it a night
You won’t die the first time
But I’m sure you will cry
When I mimic my actions unto you
Then unto me
I’ll swipe my credit card
in between your crack
(Just because you’re an ass)
Then I’ll force you
to swipe me in the cuts
(You’ll make with the assy card)
Dragging us both across the yard
Damaged, broken, undone…
Let me bleed for you - the pain inside
I like the woosey feeling just before I die
I’ll cover the wounds, do it all again later
This gets me off - yeah the baiter….
The night has come, you’ll breathe your last
Unfortunately by killing you -
I’m killing me too
For you are my twin…our love was a sin
Author notes
new:
does this make you question anything? 
old author's notes:
well a few cliches but with a new ''spin'' on them. forgive me - I'll go jump now. cough...grabs parachute with holes..cough*
thanks for the invite 
Written December 17th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Keep it Nutty by Diseased144.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Weeee Kryspin you spun quite a web of golden eggs here is this rather ghastly and hysterical write! Oh my the old Kryspin spin on things again proves to be another clever creative genius of writes! Thanks for the hearty laughs and pleasure of reading this one! Oh, I also wish you the best of luck in the contest!
~Nikki~ -
I’ll swipe my credit card
in between your crack
(Just because you’re an ass)
Then I’ll force you
to swipe me in the cuts
(You’ll make with the assy card)
Dragging us both across the yard
Move over, Ana, cause I'm about to roll all over the place from this!
This was just TOO cute...which is weird considering the subject matter...lol. But you did a marvelous job, dearheart, for this was just sparkling with little gems everywhere, 
, and had such a clever tone to it all. Very nice and thank you SO much for that belly aching laugh!
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LMAO. Oh man, this was too good. You had so many things going on in this poem, I just don't know what I enjoyed about it the most. You definitely took every possible cliche and threw it in there and made it INTERESTING to read. Goddess forbid people actually do that no and then. lol. the whole credit-card-because-you're-an-ass lines had me rolling.
Edited on Dec 17, 6:32 p.m. because ''.
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