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you can dance if you want to

grievances set to the tune of the elevator

hovering over the unwavering existance of ants

fellow beings being accosted by unfortunate circumstances

taking a toll on their civilizations

ruthless dictators pounding incessantly making death tracks

condemning those that exist in light

and praising the ones that spew hatred to the masses

imagine a world of elevator music

imagine a world of ants

imagine a world of reversed affections

and where no one knows how to dance

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Written December 17th, 2004

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  • Synful-symphony
    March 20, 2007

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    I am surprised no one commented on this, this is very well done. I dislike this world of elevator music as well. I assume this poem is about bringing the soul back into music and not just it being mindless background noise in a society to busy to listen. The only thing is that I would take out the word being from this sentence "fellow beings being accosted by unfortunate circumstances". It is not nessecary and it interrupts the flow a bit. Great work though.