Miles of road
countless abandoned houses
ghosts of history
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Written August 21st, 2002
Pic by StarrySue22 at www.deviantart.com
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This was a great Haiku. I got the feel of a ghost town and the emptiness that it must feel like from this and wondering what it must have been like when it was alive.
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Sends such thought provoking pictures to my head sis, wonderful
indeed and yes I called you sis, I wanted you to know that is why
I wrote the poem, so I could try and cleanse myself from these feelings that are choking the very breath of life from me. I am fighting even if I am going through my rouhest battle yet. Thanks if I need you hope you don't mind I come looking for you. -
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hi!
glad you clicked for comments
i liked the middle line and the last line
thought the first line was weak, and it is also not 5 syllables
{i think of haiku in strict terms of proper syllable counts}
also didn't nail me emotionally
(to be honest)
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thanks for stopping by my little bubble of AP
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namaste,
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A lot of them scattered across the plains here too...very sad.
~Gayla~ -
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Simply stunning. Very vivid haiku. -
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really good haiku. thanks for sharing. :) -
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That is absolutely fantastic. I grew up summers in Maine and one of the things that we did was go hunting for abandoned houses and my brothers and cousins and I used to go through them looking for treasures and making up stories about the people who lived there. This brought back happy memories for me! -
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Reminds me of some places nestled away in the mountians around here. Nice write. -
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Love wandering in old houses...Nice Susan...:) Love, ~ Ce -
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Old houses make great haunts...lol...I have lived in a couple. One was actually inhabited by a presence which was seen by more than one person. -
LOL i may hve left off a lot Sheryl
i had that migraine when i wrote it (LOL)
((((((HUGS)))))
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Wow, what a dilapilated old place...lol But such potential!! Needs just a little paint and fixing up and TLC (uh huh...and a bulldozer) :)
Um, check your syllable count on first line missie...think you're one off...lol
Sorry, me not mean to nitpick...maybe I counted wrong...but thought I'd mention it. Very minor detail...
You can smack me for that. :) GREAT haiku...sweet old memories...HUGSSSSSSS
Edited by Lone Poet on Aug 22 because 'forgot :)'. -
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a sad write for sad buildings..how we leave things to rot..~~~GILL~~~ well done Sis... -
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Yes hon, I to know these old buildings so well as a child. Explored so many of them. Brings back a lot of memories. Bill
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it makes you wonder about the history of these sad buildings :)pjs -
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i actually own a house kind of like that. only it is one story. there are a line of sheds that are on the property too. i actually bought the property just because of that house. i leave it just the way it is. the house (on my property) is i think from either 1887 or 1904. don't know which. i have cows that graze on the property (and no they don't disturb the house or the sheds)
:0)
Nam
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