You’re letting them die inside tonight
You’re letting them go hungry into the night
You’re letting them fall one by one
Making them fall until there is none
What is love in their world of pain?
What can they justify if they have no name?
Why can’t they have rights just like us?
Why can’t they sit in front on the bus?
Is it because we enjoy human suffering at their expense?
Or because we like to separate them with a rabbit-proof fence,
Treating them like animals, because we have no common sense.
Is there anything you can suggest in your defense?
Or should I just stand down and settle for less?
Because our country says they know what’s best.
But please can’t I just fight for all of the rest,
Who can’t fight because they have no voice, no face, and
No chance to sit at that educational desk.
I will not stand down
I will not be made silent
My country can’t hold me down...
Cuz baby I can get violent...
But violence is not an option in this world which is forsaken
It is only a conclusion for those who see no option
Author notes
Its about suffering and descrimination to those in other countries and in our own. And to those who have nothing and we as Americans can be selfish while they are underpriviledged, thats all..i hopes you likes
Written December 16th, 2004
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I am just glad that there are other people in the world who have these thoughts. Society is so screwed up. It's so easy to just turn our backs on those who need are help, or to discriminate people just because of their skin color, social class, or sexual orientation. I think it's pathetic and people do need to start standing up. Your poem was great and very inspiring. I think you have a true talent.
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Controversial!!
I absolutely love this poem. I think it is controversial if y ou see it for what it's worth and not what you wish it could be. There's just so much symbolism and so many hidden meanings. I can understand why some people would think the rhyming technique mediocre or what have you, but that's on the surface. On the surface this poem does happen to be a little child-ish, but I think that sometimes you have to read more in-depth with it to truley grasp what the writer was trying to convey. You did a wonderful job!!..Don't let them bring you down, most people don't like what they can't understand. *Sandrine* -
Thanks for your comment..i'll definitely try to expand my vocab...thanx for the constructive critisism..Aida
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I don't see why others wouldn't like it unless they were offended. Yes, the majority of America (what you see on tv) is selfish but we are all human. You can't judge a person by their nation s0o0o0o0o0o0o with that being said I thought that the only advice i could give you would be to expand your vocabulary a bit to spice things up. Have fun,
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thank you much..Aida
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The message this poem holds is one I've forever been thinking of. So true!
It's a good write. It really is.
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this is reallt good someparts i think u tried a little to hard to rhyme but over all it was very good. the messssage is so true and it has alot of meaning. keep wrting
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damn!!!! nice poem!
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Kick-Ass Awesome
I personally liked this poem. It's true. Americans are selfish. They don't want us fighting the war in Iraq because it's not for our freedom. I love it. And you were right it is very controversial. -
americans are selfish..
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well..i guess we all cant be perfect..but i tried to do it as best as i could..i was trying it as abeat poem..i dont know.it sounds better when i say it out loud..much more enthusiasm is givin..well i think so anyways..thanks for commenting...Aida
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You've chosen a really goo topic here. I don't think it's as controversial as you make it out to be, but still good. I love social issues like this. The poem does seem a little old fashioned though, and the meter doesn't fit quite right. With a little bit of work though, this could be great! Keep writing!
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I thought this was a very good-subject write. It gives discrimination-awareness to others who may know of this, but may not realize that they, themselves do such things as tear others down. Maybe not in an open way, but subtly. Also the way it goes ignored, and gets passed by as if it weren't happening.
The rhyming technique was a little mediocre, but it was a pretty good read/write 50/50. Nice work.
Abby Eyeball
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yeah, there is definitely controversy over this subject. But you know it's good when it raises an eyebrow..lol..thank you for reading it and taking the time to comment.i really appreciate you liking it..i knew when i wrote it..it was going to be different than what a lot of people write on here and this website really needs some variety ..like Dustyragdoll said..I'm not writing about how my life sucks like everyone else does..welli guess i'll cut this one short...Thanks again...Aida
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Love the topic for this poem and by what I can see there is controversy(sp?) over it. Very good, I like this difference in this poem. My favorite is all of the questions in this poem. Different style that I have never seen before. Keep it up and good luck.
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I think that this brings about a valid point, stated very bluntly. No one fights for these people because, in reality, we need the poor to stay poor. America only works with a bottom class. Economically that is the only way the U.S. can stay a super power, having a high level of unemployment and having a race as a scapegoat. By telling people all of their lives they are inferior, they begin to think they are inferior. Eventually they will stop trying to be the best of the best, because they are constantly told that they can never be that good. We should help them, but we don't. Unfortunatly it has been that way throught time. There will always be a top and a bottom, with a fuzzy layer in between that no one can identify.
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thankyou much..im glad he read it and gave his opinion..there are always two sides to the same story..lol..but thanks for loving it..we all need an eye opener every now and then..lol...Aida
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Hay...i love it!!! n i completely agree...with both you and blankslate...we have alot of selfish people in this world...n to be honest im probably one of them...but there are also descent people...n there isnt just descrimination outside of this country...there is ALOT of it within ourselves...and its really sad...if you take away tha name of our country, race and religion, arent we all the same? we all bleed the same dont we? i HATE descrimination...sry for goin on but yeh i LOVED tha poem!
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thank you for your honest opinion..hmm..i agree with you also..but then again disagree...i'm not going to go into detail and save ourselves the next 2 seconds of our lives with it..but i like the fact that you werent afraid to disagree..its amazing how many followers there are on this website..you my friend are a leader..by the way i could give up everything materialistic in a heartbeat and still survive if i wanted to.. yet again ..i thank you for your comment..it was refreshing.....Aida
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I respect the job you did, but I disagree with your sentiment that Americans in general are selfish. Yes, there has been and is discrimination in this country, but no more so and certainly less than other countries. I don't think I'd want to live as a woman (not that I'm a woman) in many of the countries of the world. I like the fact that we can disagree with the government and speak against it. There are many positives to living in America. That is a popular misnomer...some Americans are selfish, most are not. We may be spoiled, but are you willing to give up your computer? But you did a good job on your poem and for that I salute you.
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thank you much..i knew when i started it..that i was going to love finishing it..and although its not perfect..in my eyes is pretty damn close to it...plus i speak about the real stuff most people wouldnt write about..everyone is so wrapped in their lives..that it just becomes so difficult to step back and really think about whats happening...let alone to think of someone else..i just felt it had to be said..if if someone has to say it..why not me??..but back to you..lol..thanks for that comment ..i never thought of using soldier in that context..i like it..i might use it someday..lol.
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excellent and well expressed.
wow! I am impressed. this is very well written and creatively so. I really felt what you were writing and could actually visualize the different things going on. Keep up the fantastic work. -
i think the authors comment was pointless and unnecessary *sp?*. your poem said it all. i really liked how youre not saying 'my life sucks' like most of us on here. youre standing up for something you believe in. which i dont see much of on here. this was great. you did a wonderful job at expressing your opinion. i dont know if i like this so much cuz i think the same exact thing, or just the writing. i like your point of view on here as well. instead of saying 'oh im a black women, i want my rights.' youre talking from an observers point of view. unique.
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Take a stand! Lend a hand!
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keep fightin lil' soldier (and by soldier - i dont mean army) to me it's a different kind. You fight for the truth in the brutality of mankind.. (i dont have a way with words).. my point is, this was beautiful, and I appreciate you taking the time to do this, think about this and write from your heart. Don't ever change ~
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i like this so much it really good keep up the good work
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I really like this poem! Good job! Keep up the writing!
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