I love the morning sunshine
filtering across your face
dappled beams
of radiant luminosity
bathing you in grace
A spiked silk mane
frames your chiseled jaw
lips still plump from passion
moist breath
leaves my heart in awe
Supple fingers curled
lightly on my breast
a soft sigh (mine)
as you sleep on
I know that I’ve been blessed
Memories of ecstasy
linger in my mind
bodies straining
detached - then merged
legs and thighs entwined
I breathe you in
inhaling sweat and fire
as you slumber on
oblivious
to my burgeoning desire
These are the times I treasure most
as the day begins anew
an epiphany
I’m reborn
Waking beside you
Patricia Gibson-Williams
December 16, 2004
Author notes
I commented on Candle askew by Ascoltatore and The Tide
by Scott Adelmann. I read quite a few more and loved most of your choices. I hope to comment on more in the future.
Written December 16th, 2004
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A contest entry
- by l......
300 points, ended August 11, 2005, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well written piece! This has such talent style with the imagery, the flow, the smoothness and of course the descriptive is just donewell. You certainly have the gifted talent of writing this style.
blessed:
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Captivating
Where are the men like you? What a beautiful write. Its wonderful how you described your feelings. Thank you, Leslie -
Excellent
I love the morning sunshine
filtering across your face
dappled beams
of radiant luminosity
bathing you in grace excellent...your romantic flare of words enlightens my mind ....this verse is brillant ...happy writings
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what a refreshing write... i'm guilty of not writing touching poetry like this... but i have to admit that it seems better than my 'darkish' poetry... i admire someone who can write a love poem where one of the lovers doesn't die or become completely disfigured in the end lol
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loved it
A vey sensual poem, obviosly you love being in love, it's a great feeling. great write -
I really enjoyed this poem. The flow is great and you express very well the emotion. I wrote a poem based on almost the same thing but it isn't even close to this.
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very emotional/good
these would be feelings i was never able to verbalize or put into word form...im glad there's other, more knowledgable poets out there - your words are my inspiration...keep writing and showing deep emotion; you show it very well -
Sweetly sensuous
Very sensuous and yet tender.A lovely use of imagery and soft,sexy words.Lucky is the person waking up to you! -
The trueness of one's love..........nicely expressed with great imagery...........best of luck in the contest............
Leance
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Beautiful write, the picture completes it
THe imagery words are amazing
Keep up the writing
Laury
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Excellent
This is very beautiful writing. Just enough erotica to make it exciting; yet it does not go over the line into vulgarity. I liked the imagery of the moment when two lovers lay spent after sharing in the intimate delight of lovemaking. Very well done. Thanks so much for your generous comments on "High Desire." -
this is great hopefully one day i will have the same feeling as you have now- well done
Crystal xxx -
It's a beautiful poem. You portrayed that love here very well indeed. Thank you for your comment on my poem too!
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I've woken up like this... it's one of the most amazing things and you wrote it beautifully. The picture is amazing too. I love all of it
great write!
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Thanks for entering my contest. This is beautiful. I know the feeling although I've never woken up beside someone. but my ex fell asleep beside me one day and well I know the feeling. thanks for entering this. It's very beautiful
Peace
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Flawless flow, and I don't usually read poems like these either. Beautiful.
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Just lovely. The words, the message, the picture. Excellent write!
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Beatiful
I think it's beautiful, and I hardly read poems like these. No pun intended. It's beautiful, great job!
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