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The Blue Wolf

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The blue wolf howls, to the midnight sky

trapped by an awesome curse.

He dared to love a maiden fair

and some called their love perverse.


He sang to her night after night

as the copper moon rose high.

and she’d sit upon her window box

and weep at his lonesome cry.


He longed for her; as the blushing rose

longs for the morning sun.

She swore, that if she was barred from him

She would love no one.


She walked out into a stony field

and called him with her song

It mattered not what others said

A love like theirs ~ could not be wrong.


He laid her down on the emerald ground

jaws fastened at her nape

and though she bowed to him willingly

they dared to call it rape.


They found them there on the sacred soil

and they grabbed her in their greed.

She begged them not to hurt him

thighs moist with blood and seed.


They tied him to the ground

And he never did protest;

For they held her by her golden hair

a knife pressed to her breast.


They spilt her blood upon him

as they cast their loathsome spell.

They bound him to a mystical stone

forever there to dwell.


Now the angry wolf howls blood red

from his prison in the rock

waiting…  for only true love’s tears

Will his faithful soul unlock.




Patricia Gibson-Williams

December 16, 2004

Author notes

This story was written based upon the stone pictured above.  It is from "Blue Heron Gem" (the have an e-bay store) and it’s one of two that I’m working on based upon the stone.  This is not the story I started with, it just sort of poured out of me as I was trying to work on the other one.  Let me know what you honestly think.  Thank you.  Patti


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  • Nicolette gold member
    December 27, 2004
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    Very good!

    Very interesting and creative interpretation of the picture - a dark and vivid write and very imaginative! I am not a big fan of "dark" poetry, but this was a delight to read. Good luck in the contest and take care!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Sapphire Rose
    December 23, 2004
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    Whoa... I loved this ever so muchly! It was complete awesomeness doubly squared cubied. You have a wonderful talent to get that out of a picture like that. Not very many people can do that, me included. Ever so nicely done and I hope you keep up the most excellentness!

  • EvilSqueegee
    December 23, 2004
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    fantabulous. Simply awsome.

    Wow. Talk about intense.

    this was fantastic. The poem flowed so well, the rhymes fit together without a seam to be detected anywhere. The rhythm was flawless, the variety in the vocabulary used was awsome. Strongly written piece.

    The emotion in this poem was also incredible. I could feel the anguish of the wolven soul, the love between the maiden and canine. It was fantastic.

    The story, while a little unorthidox, was also fantastic. It was everything a good story should be - intreaguing, able to evoke thought and emotion in the reader, and original. I loved it down to the very last letter.
    Keep up the good work!


  • -Reality-
    December 23, 2004
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    Wow.... This is awesome AngelSeeker. The beat and rhythem in this was fault free . It was smooth and helped the poem along wonderful. Great poem, I really do love this. I applaud you .

    Write on, stay strong
    Kami

  • endoftheworld
    December 23, 2004
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    I like this more then the usually depressed lover tragic ending poems because this is the first time a wolf and a fair maiden have ever been in love. Good job and keep up the work


  • traviswalser
    December 22, 2004
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    AWESOME

    That was a wonderful poem.It was absolutely amazing. I loved the imagery, I lovd the symbolism, and I loved the story. While it may have been a little... strange,physically,the spiritual aspect of the poem really soke volumes to me about love,passion, and sincere wanting.It was altogether a wonderfully perfect write.Great work.


  • onerios13
    December 22, 2004
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    Oooh...I can FEEL the goosepimples popping up now! This was a marvelous story, very intriguing and darkly romantic story, it almost reminded me of the Highway Man saga, lol. Anyhoo, I did so much enjoy this, the flow was perfect and the meter spot on..but the story itself...le sigh...very very nicely done.

  • Psych0Zach
    December 22, 2004
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    I like wolves... I also like points... that is why I am turning this into a critique... one hundred characters here I come. muahhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahahah... there... that should cover it.


  • BeautifulMistake
    December 22, 2004
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    well done

    You and I both like writing about wolfs. Iloved your poem. Great job.


  • enlightenedatheist
    December 22, 2004
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    Wow you have left me breathless. I love this piece so very much. It is just so beautiful. The imagery of this poem just takes hold of you and fills your mind the story, like a vision, a true vision almost a dream i just love it so much you totally blew me away! i know i said it before but its so tru!


  • -Lonely-Prisoner-
    December 22, 2004
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    brilliant!!


  • Frozen Roses
    December 21, 2004
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    Beautiful beyond compare.

    Wow you have left me breathless. I love this piece so very much. It is just so beautiful. The imagery of this poem just takes hold of you and fills your mind with the story, like a vision. And the poem is so emotional, when reading it you feel the deep love and saddness that you have put in this piece. This goes very well with that beautiful stone you have pictured up there. I hope to read the other one inspired by it.

    ~Achika~
    Edited on Dec 22, 7:32 p.m. because 'Plah!'.

  • SilverMoment
    December 21, 2004
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    excellent storyline and the word choice really strung it together fabulously! i really enjoyed this!

  • rightwaytohurt
    December 21, 2004
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    i really liked this piece. there were a lot of strong emotions in here. i enjoyed reading it a lot!


  • TorsoStumps
    December 21, 2004
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    this was an exellent peice of work...very imaginative...chills just rose from my spine after every word...this is a very good poem i liked it alot...i also liked your style of writing...very creative and myterious...i loved this poem...its such a beautiful peice of art...keep writing like this...people enjoy it...love what you have and dont blow it off...keep it up...exellent job.

  • Daggerae
    December 21, 2004
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    Well done. You've made me feel for the beast, I could almost hear its lonesome call. I am definately an optimist, so this was hard on me, and my desire for 'everything to be good' in the end.

    Thank you for sharing this fine work.


  • rocker4me
    December 21, 2004
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    This was wonderful, perfect imagerey. I loved how the girl would cry at his cry...So powerful your poem was.
    ~Rocke4me


  • bobistakingover
    December 21, 2004
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    That was amazing!!! It played out like a movie in my mind.


  • Ashley Mosely
    December 21, 2004
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    great imagery-but the font was a little hard on my eyes, maybe just a tad bit bigger-like the picture too and your choice of words

    ash


  • Schay
    December 21, 2004
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    I really like this poem. There were some nice images, and very strong emotions. Yesh. ^_^
    ~SR

  • a-crazed-hobo
    December 21, 2004
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    I'm feeled with so many emotions right now. I don't know whether I'd want to hug you or run away screaming. Nonetheless, great poem with excellent rhythm and rhyme. The metaphors and imagery you use is stunning and gripping. I applaud!


  • Eve Wolfen
    December 21, 2004
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    Bookmarked

    This is amazing my dear you put love between two beings a place most people would not dare tred But my dear you did it so beautifully and gracefully the words smoothed together like a quilted Story Keep it up My dear I look foward to more of your writes
    ~*Evening*~


  • Rushdy Abdul Rahman
    December 20, 2004
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    Outstanding

    Very deep, very personal, and very real. Its reminiscent of Romeo and Juliet, a forbidden tryst between two lovers. Awesome piece.

  • surfermike
    December 18, 2004
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    it flowed in the way of water inevitably moves to the ocean
    the imagery was great and the pace was natural
    and the story. . i am glad you let it come as would . . excellent win and piece


  • neemuffin
    December 18, 2004
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    amazing

    this is an amazing poem. its amazing the way a stone could inspire you to write that. it was very nicely written and had an easy to follow flow. I also like the way that the rhyming didn't seem forced at all. this poem sort of reminded me of society today, when if you love or are friends with somebody different, you are instantly ostracized and hated. very nicely done. good job!

  • DaisyDayDreamz
    December 18, 2004
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    this is really great! very inmaginative. did you win the contest? Merry christmas and a happy new year to everybody you know!!! only 1 week to go! Poppyx


  • December 18, 2004
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    Beautifully Written

    Beautifully written and great subject...Very visual and enthralling content..


  • cosmicrose
    December 18, 2004
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    Awesome.... kept me rivited to the end... with sAwoooooohh good rhythm

  • layDsayD
    December 18, 2004
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    very good

    great poem it got the feeling across nicly was dark ut not black very good


  • SliptheFlitch
    December 16, 2004
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    I am in love with this poem! This is so, so, awe-inspiring, and absolutely soul rending! I just cannot describe how much I love this poem! Great write-I am severly impressed!


  • December 16, 2004
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    I agree with everyone else, this poem was VERY well done. I felt as if I was right there watching the two in their love and agony. It was told well, you didn't rush and didn't linger on one moment, and you explained well each of their emotions.-MZ-


  • Xx Alice xX
    December 16, 2004
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    I agree, this is so well done. Takes the reader into the wilderness right there with the wolf. Makes them feel the emotions. great write.

  • Lil Wolfie
    December 16, 2004
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    Amazing!

    Wow, that was beautifully written! I am in awe of this poem, it's abso-bloody-lutely amazing!


  • Phreaxxor
    December 16, 2004
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    perfect 10

    That poem was beauty beyond compare.


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    December 16, 2004
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    Yes I was thinking of a werewolf, when I wrote this. A man who was cursed twice. I guess I could have made that more clear. Thank you for your comment. I changed the color to a brighter blue... I usually like vibrant colors too, but I was trying to use blue for this and I wasn't sure how the bright one would look. Patti


  • Sensual Sapphire
    December 16, 2004
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    I was thinking werewolf and I'll keep thinking it(otherwise I'll creep myself out.)This is very well done.Amazingly so!The flow is wonderful quick but not rushed.Which is just what this seems to need.It's an awesome stone and I can't wait to see what else it inspires in you.
    The only thing, and it's more personal than anything else, is the color you chose for the words.They seem cold.It fits the end but the begining seems to deserve a warmer one.To bad we can't alter it through out fading from one to another would be awesome for this.Sorry I'm on a visual color kick(MN is so blah right now)! lol

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