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Step Into My World

Step into my world and see.
This is what goes on inside of me.
Greed,envy, and hate mix like potions.
Oh, how I loath these sucky emotions.
I can't get away from all of this depression.
I'm so scared that soon I will have to make my
confession.

Step into my world if you dare.
Now all I have is a careless stare.
All I do now is reap what I sow.
I really need help but no one will know.
OH MY GOD I CAN'T HANDLE THIS PAIN!
OH PLEASE LORD NO I'M GOING INSANE!

Step into my world now.
Please save me I don't care how.
Hurry now before it's to late.
Why don't you just tell me my fate.
Tell my family I love them and that I will be
fine.
Tell my step-dad I hate him quickly before I flat
line.

Step into my world all you will see is black.
I can't go on and I can't go back.
All my problems are gone now, Gosh it's nice.
I took them all away with just one slice.
The day I did it there was blood all around.
Next time you see me I will be six feet under the
ground.

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Written December 15th, 2004

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  • saz
    February 25, 2005
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    WOW
    This is...amazing! I love it, its so personal and deep yet you get the emotions and set the scene so well. I really envy your talent! My favourite bit is:
    'Step into my world and see.
    This is what goes on inside of me.'
    I know everyone says this but those two lines really gripped me to your poem and made me want to read the rest...
    Great write! Please, please, please write some more!!
    Saz

  • Love-is-Eternal
    December 16, 2004
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    Oh my gosh. Talk to me about this ok Im sending you an IM.
    -ihateguys
    ps good poem though-very intense


  • Touchof1der silver member
    December 15, 2004
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    WoW! There is amazing intensity behind your words. It's as if they have a pulse of their own. This is written very well and very expressively. One of the things I love most about free style poetry is the fact that it allows the writer to get as expressive as they want and it allows you to inflict as little or as much emotion into a piece to pass on to the reader. This is a perfect example of why I love this style so much. Don't ever stop stretching yourself as a writer or sharing your talent.
    ~Kimberly