I have often thought,
that those that can hear,
are missing essential ears.
For they speak to me of silence:
gold and pure,
quiet and serene.
To myself I wonder,
how can they miss,
the cacophony of sound,
found in every silent drop?
For silence speaks of anger and tension.
between a warring family that refuses to talk,
silence speaks of wonder and joy,
in the gentle smile of a mother holding her newborn baby,
silence speaks of a never-ending empty sorrow,
in the souls of those seeking their missing peace.
Silence is noise,
in every shape and form.
I fear for the deaf,
who must never sleep in the booming, roaring, thunder of their everyday silent world.
Author notes
Written December 15th, 2004
A contest entry
- Randomness!! by Wishful Dreamer.
300 points, ended February 6, 2005, 54 entries
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NICE!
NICE! I hate to say it (only becuase it makes me look dumber and more oblivious to the obvious =P) but this poem taught me alot about appreciating silence. But I imagine that was also a goal of yours by posting this. Keep it up!
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Awsome fantastic i have always felt silence was not that quiet at all .Great read great write
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this was awesome. very well spoken.. you are good at what you write! nice poetry! i would have to say this is extremly awesome
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I really like this and I know what you mean with the tension thing. Silence is not always a good thing. Silence can mean a bad relationship too.
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I truly never looked opun silence this was before. Good write.
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profound
I liked this very much so
Silence plays a major role in our lives, and there is an amount of silence that we need..Sometimes we need silence to hear our still small voice and reflect on our existence. I like this so much
Melissa -
i really loved this poem. i felt like you took a concept that is so pure and unexplored and hit it right on the head. as poets words are such a big part of our life. fact that you can find language in silence impresses me. its an excellent write. i alwasys enjoy reading your stuff.
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oh wow! it's funny how someone can take such a simple concept like silence and turn it into something HUGE. these are things that we sometimes consider and then forget about...i'm glad that you took the time to remind us.
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7.2/10
Creativity: I thought the ending was terrific. However, I also think you could cut a few words so my imagination could be better evoked. 7/10
Innovation: This is pretty standard stuff. I don't think you are really exploring new territory. 5/10
Technique: Very nice. I like your use of contradiction. And you show a keen awareness of what you want on the page. 7/10
Readability: Aside from the fact that I found this verbose, I believe this reads well and that you are easy for my attention span. 8/10
Emotionality: I got chills running down my spine. Wow! This kind of reminds me of Ian Curtis. 9/10 -
wonderful piece about the amazing power of silence, how it can sometimes describe or depict very much more than words itself and the lines
"Silence is noise,
in every shape and form.
I fear for the deaf"
really push that point forward. once again, a great write!
~nameless
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I like the line, "the cacophony of sound/ found in every silent drop?" great job on writing this. I really like it.
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thanks everyone for your comments!
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Awesome
This is really cool! How ever did you come across writing something like this! This is really awesome. I really really like it (if you can't already tell). Wow.
-Much love
-Kayla -
Great flow, feel.
I enjoyed the flow. I think it would be cool for you to elaborate. To run with this idea, run, run, -
Cool write. I had to click it in the featured box because the title clicked instantly with the song. I can hear those words without thinking "the words of the prophets where written on the subway walls and tenemant halls, and whispered in the sound of silence."
Still, very cool descriptives. Silence isn't something that's easy to put into words, fun stuff. keep it up -
wow... this was amazing... the truth behind the words... i have to agree with.... silence kills love and the bond between a relationship.. but wow.. the wording used in this.. the emotion brought out.. the flow was dazziling.. literally amazing.. i think you have a great talent.. this is definetlly going into my bookmarked liste.. great write.. want to hear more from you
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thanks for catching that! and thanks for your comment
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Oh wow...such splendid imagery. I love all the possible meanings of "missing peace"; very clever wordplay. Silence truly is loud - painful sometimes - it's a lot like loneliness.
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AWESOME. I have always felt that silence is the most deafening noise of all, for it pounds in your ears and head and heart like no other. I also often think of how horrible it would be to be deaf. You wrote this so perfectly, I can't even think of the right words to praise it. Wow. I am awed. Excellent job.
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This is beautiful. Not being able to 'hear with our ears' sure puts a different spin on the world, and it's hard to know which is more correct. Your poem has made me interested in wanting to explore famous deaf people to see how they have interpreted the world- especially deaf scientists, and psychologists...the popular public ones are of course muscians...so I'm interested in others. Thanks for writing suchh an interesting poem.
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Excellent
This was such a clever observation...Indeed ..is silence golden? Perhaps silence to a deaf person is not the silence we know and understand.....I enjoyed this very much.one slight error if I might make so bold...."For the speak to me of silence: should I think be "they"? Great write
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Well Done!
oh my i like this! So many times I've thought to descripbe silence as noise and never once quite captured it the way you did here. Thank you so much this was wonderful
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