Open to all things unreal,
Long ago forgotten,
Never really loved,
I stand here alone,
Waiting in the open circle.
The forest here is thick
With trees of an unnatural green,
A smell wrapping around me
Like cut pine and burnt wood,
Where I stand in the circle.
How the trees formed this,
I do not know.
It may be an act of God,
Or possibly an act of man,
But alone I wait in the circle.
Speckles of sunlight dance
On the forest ground
As the breeze blows the leaves
Of each tree gently above,
Making my little circle twirl.
I hear random snaps
Out there among the trees,
The forest is alive around me,
But you are nowhere to be found.
Yet I wait in the middle of the circle.
I wait for what feels like eternity,
Until I smell you on the air.
You walk out to join me,
A smile warming your face
As your arms encircle me.
I nuzzle into your neck
As you hold me tight,
Wanting nothing but to feel you,
And for this moment to never end,
You and me, together, in the circle.
You squeeze me tighter
And I smile softly
As your warmth engulfs me.
We sway with the breeze,
Us, as one, with the circle.
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Written December 14th, 2004
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this was a grand poem indeed it is nice to have someone to share circle with. I really enjoy this poem for I love nature poem fot they made me feel closer to the Gods. I think that you did this poem very well. i thank you so very much for shareing this poem with all of us.
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this was incredible i really loved it...the magery was phenominal...the senic images were awesome....i love nature....and i am a neo-pagan...therefore every inch of nature is of greatr signifigance to me...this poem reallly emphasised the phenominal aspect of nature...loved it x
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LOL! Thanks! Hm, maybe I have made a new genre. That would be kind of cool.
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This is a great pastoral love poem. I think you've invented a new genre.
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Mixing love with Nature is good. Your poem is beautiful, filled with imagery. The senses are astounded by the beauty. Hugs, Patricia
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It may have just been me but I thought the poem started out like a metaphor for something, a feeling perhaps. Toward the end I see that it's a walk in the woods with the one you love. I think it has a nice cozy imagry. I'd like to see some more descriptions on the way that the airy crisp atmosphere kinda sets you up for a romance trip but that's just my experience with woods. I like it!
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I really like the line, "I hear random snaps/ out there among the trees." great job in describing this.
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I agree with glazecovered, this is a nice break from the angsty poetry on this site. While I read this I found myself in a forest with the wind rushing through pine trees. I really enjoyed this poem. Great work.
Keep writing,
Silver
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This has such lovely imagery! So soothing, so calm, it is a nice break from all the angsty poetry I read around the site. The last stanza was especially nice - very warm and comforting. You did a terrific job on this one!
~Anastasia
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