Screaming Acid-Blackwashed White Hearted...
Searing Artistical Obfuscation..
HATE ME...I AM NOT WHAT YOU CARE TO HAVE...
Blinding black skies painted grey flowers
Carelessly tossed in my direction.
HATE ME...I AM THE OTHERWORLDLY.
Shouting Haikus This Bellowing Banshee
Deafening Reprising Acutely Paining Realitly Shouts She...
SO HATE ME...HATE ME...HATE ME
I AM NOT THAT SWEET
Here I am crying, bro
cken on the floor...
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DAMN GET OUT OF MY HEAD
Written December 14th, 2004
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this was awesome!
the part where it says "grey flowers" kinda reminded me of the album clear hearts grey flowers by Jack off Jill 
hehe. ((i love JOJ. lol)) this was great! keep it up~!
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You can sense an artistic anger in these words, anger most obviously present, but done with such creative intent, the effect is not lessoned, it instead adds to the overall sense you gather from this poem, bringing out these incredibly deep images of what is going on in the authors mind, what they are thinking and possibly why they are think about what you can assume is their thoughts translated into poetry.
I take this in the form of a relationship that has broken off severely, like a messy a decapitation, it was meant to be clean and smooth, but everything ended up getting jagged and shattered all about, leaving the two people involved in chaos and upset.
Entirely poetic and creative, it leaves a taste of dark beauty on the readers lips and forever scars their mind with it elegant sense of words.
much love,
James
Edited on Dec 31, 2:48 p.m. because ''. -
Whoa...that's got to be THE most emotional blitzkrig I've read tonight, lol. The pounding cadence like a madman on crack...lol. Thoroughly electrifying with a haunting finish, this was bullets speeding at the flashes of intuition heading 300 down the ramp!
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Ha! I love this piece, The title instantly attracted me to it, Its awesome, And I love how this is written, It reminds me of my friend Jonahs style, very sparatic yet creative, I love it, Good job.
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Its because I am the goddammned sensation
That little devil upon your shoulder.
That little devil as you grow older.
I am That which should not be known.
I am whosoever believes in the unknown.
Hate me Hate Me HATE ME, Scream 'EYE'
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..This is my personal venting place...Just to speak my mind...you are welcome to do whatever...Its just another piece I guess...But if i say something...Like start to make sudden wierd comments...please dont be alarmed.
for instance...right now..I'm pissed off and I havent the slightest clue why...well probably I do...but...ANywz
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Tell me why I cant fucking stab your eyes with the thorns from the white rose you've given me...
I've hated the feeling...
I feel them watching...
I feel them staring...
Boring holes into my mind.
Holes ... Holes.
Those devils of the divine..
Help me...I'm dead.
Help me...I'm Dying...
Help me...I was living.
Help me...BAstard inside my head.
I can't see that fucking light
The one everyone's talking about.
I cant stop fucking cursing you...
Its like they were placed inside my mouth.
No its not foul Language...
No its not my attempt at redemption.
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