I exuviate the tired, worn skins of old
To reveal a persona, resplendent, bold;
My soul, the most perfect part of me,
Exudes her aura of majestic glory...
Rainbows permeate a tenebrous cloak
As flames of faith incessantly stoke
Stirring hope, once dormant, to wake
With renewed fury impossible to slake
After replete past regrets evaporate,
Circling shadows of doubt dissipate;
This divine spirit shall slowly emerge
From intrinsic chaos she's come to purge;
Formed by tribulations, I am reborn:
Fraught with vigor, free from all scorn,
Prepared for inhibitions to come unfurled,
Exposing my soul to a receptive world
Splashes of invisible color add iridescence
To a being coruscating in regal luminescence
Rising above troubles once holding her bound;
Heart fortified with a mind clear and sound,
I awaken, nascent to each forthcoming day,
Quelling apprehension until it fades away;
Despite inflictions my spirit must sustain,
The queen within shall assume her reign.
Author notes
in every person, especially those who have been repressed by the counterproductive societal forces in this world, is a divinity, a royal being awaiting emergence...
my internal self has finally fused with my external self.
If you happen to reach this through the featured box, please be considerate and leave a comment--and not the trifling "nice write, thanks for sharing". I will return the favor to all. Thank you.
Written December 14th, 2004
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Wow, this is such a powerful piece. I absolutely love that ending. You are brilliant, far beyond words. If I could, I'd give you a thousand clappies. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Vibrant
Wow, this a great "self realization" type of poem. It glows with unreal vocabulary. I love the idea of the "divine self," because it implies there is a part of everyone that is perfect. The loss of inhibition and the ability to make one's presence known is important, but it is difficult for most people. (I am certainly no exception).
I like your idea in the author notes about the external self merging with the internal self, as I think it is important. In order to partake in the world, there is a barrier in everyone that must be broken. I think the way my dad phrases it is when someone is "coming into their own."
I also love the last line. It ties all your thoughts together beautifully.
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WOW!
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Ah, to only have such a wonderful grasp on the English language. You dear put my humble words to shame
What a magnificent piece this is. I wish my time was not so limited so I could just spend day perusing your wonderful poetry...but alas work, family, life all calls.
Thanks for including me on your home page as one of your favorites. I am honored
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Claim it Darlin! I don't think I ever read this one. I did need to go to the dictionary once but well worth the trip.
The message here is as good as the writing, altogether VERY empowering, majestic even.
Peace, Rob -
spiritually atisfying
I loved the big words anf flow of this peice. The "big words" really lent a piece of your personality to this poem! Of late it seems I have been caught up reading so many darker poems, but this one really brought to light the fact that there can be hope, if you but let it happen. Thank you, this means alot to me.
-Darkness
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Exquisite
Ah! Such exquisite perfection! You are the quintessential wordsmith. This was wonderful. Oh, to find that inner royalty buried deep inside. You seem like one very confident, self-assured individual. I especially liked the lines:
Formed by tribulations, I am reborn:
Fraught with vigor, free from all scorn,
Prepared for inhibitions to come unfurled,
Exposing my soul to a receptive world
Your poetry so obviously comes from the heart and truly speaks to my soul. Very well done indeed. I look forward to reading more of your works as time allows.
~ Lee Stone
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'Heart fortified with a mind clear and sound,
I awaken, nascent to each forthcoming day,
Quelling apprehension until it fades away;'
this piece said it all for me. it is the point were the mind lets the heart to find its way too and you, as a whole, are ready to deal with anything that comes in your way! well done for this fine piece.
HBH
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Exquisite Accomplishment!
My dear sister, not only do I belive you've regained your magic hand, I also believe you have the midas touch, the golden thumbs and a brain that ticks like an endless clock. You've written a brilliant poem, though I had to look up a few words in our trusty dictionary, you've come back full force through all the trials and tribulations that surrounds you, you've prevailed and it shows in your writing. You've earned every applause and more with this exquistie piece of poetry. More kudos to you dear sis and keep on penning, you have a true gift.
All my love,
Avril (Big Sister)
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Wonderful!
Raven...intoxicating imagery and wonderful metaphoric display.
Once again, like my previous readings of your work(yes still catching up with comments, etc.) you have me impressed with your grasp of language and vocabulary. I think I am going to stick around your work whenever I can. If I already had a pretty vast vocabulary....YOU are definitely making it grow for me. Thanks, teach!
{{whippin out the notepad and pen}}
Dang, this is better than English Lit classes!
What a multitude of metaphors and vast pallete of colorful descriptives! You painted such a beautiful picture of feminine strength and courage with such delicate intricacy and finesse....precision even.
I love this...nice and tight and crisp too!
With lovely articulation you pretty much say..."I am woman, hear me roar!" Actually, this piece sings it, in high glory!
I am happy for you....and if it isn't too trite : "You GO Girl!"
Very moving and inspirational, Raven...I look forward to more. 
Luv, ~Kitty {{{{
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Woah! Very big words here! Too advanced for my level!
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Beautiful and stunning the images are spectacular and breath taking very powerful and vibrant thank you for letting me read your work it is very inspiring and beautifuly penned ..
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No words are enough to describe this one!
This is beyond what words can describe! The best of the best! You are one the best poet in AP that exudes the power of the mind, a beauty beyond compare and a poem so extra ordinary!
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WHOAH!!!! That was so talented and absolutely amazing! You are emarkably talented and the background was also beautiful and suited the poem perfectly. It flowed well, and the word choice was absolutely amazing. I've been looking in the featured box and i've been quite disapinted with the poems ive found on there. but this on the other hand was so beautiful and i have not got one bad thing to say about it! the rhyming was great too. My favorite part was the first verse.
well keep writing you're awesome!
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this is absolutly amazing, the background you have chosen reminds me of a gypsy..which is odd because, i am doing a series of poems on gypsies right now! even as this poem has as you say 'big words', you have chosen them wisely and i would also like to add that i think they all add to the effect of the poem.
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awesome
This was very beautiful. I loved how descriptive it was. Not too many poems on here have those 'big words', but you did an amazing job with this. I loved it! Keep up the great work. :-) -
crystaldust 16-09-05 21:25
Big words indeed, but they do not seem to have flowed naturally all the time. The ideas, the healing, the unfolding of the fusion are very impressive and very well expressed. I've made a few points in an IM if you feel like reading it.
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That is just ridiculosly funny, warning warning several big words used.
All the latinate words like exuviate, iridescence, dissipate etc, I do like an varied vocabulary but the sheer density of these words, with their inbulit abstractness, evasion made this poem hold weakly in my mind an sort of float away with the last word. I get from the subject matter and the image used in the background, taht a kind of mysty, fleeting almost magical sound world was trying to be evoked but I still think this poem would have benefited more from more concrete, shorter and so snappier words.
The one time I think the ryhme comes dangerously close to sounding trite is, I'm thinking me/glory.
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I enjoyed this piece yes you were right many big words yet still beautiful...keep up the great writes also I love your background lol
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EXQUISITELY, EXCELLENTLY EXECUTED!!!!!
I have to say that this piece is chock full of illustrious vocabulary and has left a reader or two mezmerized, this ia an extremely beautiful and very well written piece of poetry... You have chosen the proper words to convey your message exquisitely. A most enjoyable read, keep up the good work, you do this VERY well. AngelicMistress
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the hook brings you back
word for word this piece stacks up. never a weak point, never ambiguous, never ineffective. congrats. you're flippin' awesome. way to use your talent. -
OF course I love the vocab you used. I like the healing this piece conveys. This is a bit longer than I prefer but the theme of the piece, the stitching of the soul mesmerized me. Wonderful write. I must say...congratulations on a healing.
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Kudos!!!
Raven, Your illustrious vocabulary produces images that can't be compared. You really show the reader that everyone does have special worth in this work. I was overwhelmed as I read this and I'm still sitting here saying wowwwwwwww!!!!!!!!
Abosolutely one of the best works that I have ever read.
I think even Mr. Shakespeare could have taken lessons from the Almighty Aphrodite!!!
Kudos-standing and applauding!!!
Joyce
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