Her body formed so perfectly, curves perfect in every place
this form, this esquisite form, radiates beauty from her very being
I stare in awe. I can not move, her essence permiates every inch of my soul
her smile, her lips, her hair--breathtaking
her breasts, her curves, her legs-formed from the heavens.
her voice so gentle and soft,
sweet like honey--the very thought of hearing her speak ravishes my body
my mind tumbles into darkness, I can not form a coherent thought.
this creature standing before me, this entity infront of my very eyes.
I can not take it--to continue to gaze upon her would mean the end of my very life
Yet I can not look away. Something draws me to her
Something pulls me from where I am to where she is.
Moving towards her, I do not even feel my legs moving
The closer I get the more I can smell her--her intoxicating aroma fills my senses
my breathing quickens, as I try to inhale her scent.
Then we meet. My lips against hers.
So soft, and warm
those firey lips consume me
Suddenly I see my body crumbling to the floor--my flesh melting into the earth.
My soul is being torn from my body,
I feel myself merge with her.
We are one.
Author notes
This poem describes the allure of sin and the ultimate destruction that comes from giving into it. Thank God for His Son's sacrifice on the cross that frees us from the eternal death that is the only gift sin can give us!!
Please note--I use a 'woman' as a metaphor for sin--this poem has nothing to do with sex!
Written December 14th, 2004
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Fantastic .. need i say more?
hannah -
intresting description of sin. it can be very decieving. praise to our Lord and Savior who forgives us of our sin. nice job and thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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An excellent poem, full of passion, with a little bit of erotic touch. Hmmmm, done well with this. Keep it up, you write well.
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The emotion of this writing is the poetic drive. One step over the edge of prose. Driven forward by the writer's transformation. Alludes to biblical themes. Stopping just before crossing a retreating Victorian line.
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wow, two people who finally fall for one another as one, actualy did fall to their deaths. how beautifully tragick.
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how about changing "nostrills" to "senses"? the entire line is so cool, u use nice words like intoxicating, and aroma, but the line just screeeeeches to a halt with that awful word.... NOSTRILLS!!! yes you should change it to say senses. yes.
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GREAT
wow this is so great! idk where to begin! you just did such a great job describing this woman, and then, everything about her, her smell her appearence, everything, and then the merge into one thing was great! perfect even! keep it up! -
coo poem lots of details keep it up
Gothica*
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