Darkness can be worn
in comfortable folds
of moonless nights
when the wind-chased
clouds are deliberating
dense and low.
Wrap me in blankets
of thick fog where
the light cannot reach,
and the cool wetness
gathers in droplets
upon my cheeks.
No one need ever know
they are not all from
the black night mist
cleansing me sweetly
Beneath this pine -
Hiding my tears.
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Written December 14th, 2004
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very very good
absolutely amazing work...i loved it! -
This is a great write! I like the imagery and emotion you used. Really good job.
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I love this poem, because it is so beautifully written with spectacular imagery. But then again, I also hate the feelings that engendered this poem, because it is so utterly sad and forlorn. Your second stanza seemed to speak to me the most--mainly because it is akin to the same kind of imagery I use in my dark/depressing writes. I would hope that things do get better, although no one can ever say for certain that they will. This is nice, in all due respects.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Very nice free verse style - well written.
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Beautiful!!! Your imagery is breathtaking and the ending was an excellent finale!
TD -
Sweeeeeet, that was a true joy to read, I'm going to read it again. I think it was better the second time. well well well done.
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so poetic so beautiful
beautiful touching poem just great
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Excellent
Hey, nice read!
Loved it but then Misty, rainy days are my favorites.
Ever seen a cloud flow soundlessly up and over a rock bluff as it it were a river in reverse or a living being?
I have.
I'll remember it as long as I have the capability to think.
Be well;
Zaffen -
Beautiful imagery...and I love the phrase "when the wind-chased clouds are deliberating". The feeling of a sorrow so deep it would prompt such an intense desire for escape, was communicated so well. Quite stunning.
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fab work , welldone !
wow , fab poem , keep up the fab work , i love this poem , even though i hardly eva like sad poem's , i totally love this one , welldone , it is not easy to empress me ! ( te he he ) anyways keep writing , all the best of luck for the future , speak to you soon , bye for now , floz (candyflo )
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GREAT!
This is a very sad poem! I can feel the pain through this piece of work. VERY good!
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