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Heaven Sent

Missing image
angelic fragrance
sweet spirituality
alluring senses

universal flight
descending paradise
God's protection

obscure guardian
helpful attendant
divine messenger



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Haiku-#1
Heaven Scent
Written December 14th, 2004

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  • Sandygram silver member
    December 14, 2004
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    Thank you for the nice comment Sam. Take care, Sandy


  • Sandygram silver member
    December 14, 2004
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    Thank you for commenting and the advice. I appreciate both. I changed it around. I am still learning . Take care, Sandy

  • Sweet Briar
    December 14, 2004
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    Thank you for entering my contest... ... But on your first set of haiku you did 2 2 3... and the second you did 2 3 3 and the 3rd you did 2 3 2... I would of like it to be more of the same rhythm... but on the other hand they did fit well... But it could be more of a punch if they were about the same count... I hope you understand what I am trying to say lol

    Jenn


  • Samplette gold member
    December 14, 2004
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    A nice group of haiku's . You did a great job stringing them together.
    Sam