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Herself

She's a modern day girl
living in a womenaresaidtobeequalbutit’sstillaman’s world
just being herself

pink clothes
dirty mouth
dancing on her bed just cause

wearing-a-baggy-sweatshirt-pulled-on-her-body-still-wet-from-her-shower-and-no-bra-and-a-thong-from-Victoria’s-Secret-and-white-pants AND
         While on her period

and she says: “this is feminism, honey.”

hard rock
ideals of love
reading fantasy during math class

had-a-boyfriend-who's-now-a-friend-because-he-cheated-on-her-but-she-still-loves-him-anyways-but-isn't-fool-enough-to-try again SO
         She’s just having fun with love

and she says: “I’m me and that’s why.”

diva shirts
burgers and fries
crying in her shower away from the world

She’s a modern day girl
living in a womenaresaidtobeequalbutit’sstillaman’sworld
just being herself

Author notes

...too many changes...back to almost original
Written December 13th, 2004

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  • ATsGirl 03
    January 10, 2005
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    I love this poem!! Holy Saint Frances! I mean, not only is it a femisitic poem, but it's also a full circle ending, and I just love those too. Great job!
    Kelsi


  • Niki1227
    December 17, 2004
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    Great job your very talented


  • True Love Gal
    December 16, 2004
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    an excellent write

    excellent write, keep up the good job, and don't you ever stop writing not even for the world.

    Happy Holidays


  • Yummy Cinnamon Bun
    December 16, 2004
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    true

    yeah i really like this. very true words for a female great gob on this. i really really love it.

    still i remain
    erynn

  • LadyCapulet328
    December 14, 2004
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    Very Very NIce!! I love it its all so true we have so much to deal with in private and so much to learn while we're crying in the shower.Never give up on something you think is true love even if cheating is involved people really do change and mature, so love him from afar or upclose and either way will keep you happy...Keep living like a modern girl never care what the world thinks of your life or youll be another bottle blonde sexing her way to the top of a mans world instead of trying to change it into a womans world~V~


  • lordoftherings gold member
    December 14, 2004
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    one ofd the best free form verse poems i have read in a long time, almost 20th century beatnik going on here. Even the conversation happening between the two styles is unique. I hope you wil write more likje this and perhaps create a modern form for everyone to use because it is interesting and unlike what another commentor said, not overdone...it suits the voice of the speaker in the poem. gregg


  • janstar
    December 14, 2004
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    Good!!!!!

    Excellent. Its kinda like a 'this-is-life-for-a-woman-and-this-is-the-way-it-is' type of poem (sorry to use the same clever technique). Its very in your face, very real, VERY NOW. I enjoyed this, and perhaps have learned something about women too. Well done!!!


  • dark poetress
    December 14, 2004
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    That was a great poem.
    This is the new age,
    I don't want to be equal, i want to be different,how else will i be seperated from other,
    great poem keep up the good work.
    Thanx for the comment.


  • macandrew
    December 14, 2004
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    very good

    Loved the format on this one. I found myself seeing two sides to the story, the girls and the worlds.

    Nicely done.
    John


  • autumns ashes
    December 14, 2004
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    v.cool....totally expresses what us girls do

  • Kym
    December 14, 2004
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    Unfinished greatness

    I like the message of the poem, and I think it could really go somewhere. But the runtogetherwords and the ---- between things, while an interesting tool, I believe are overdone in this poem. Nice job, but what do you think of working a bit more on it?

  • -TragedY-
    December 14, 2004
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    good poem

    I really liked how your poem explored the contadictoions to what women do and what they are viewed as

  • robyn mcdonald
    December 14, 2004
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    thats awesum.. its one of a kind. great work!

  • WhiteRose23
    December 13, 2004
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    this is cool ive never read anything like this good job

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