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Christmas Day 2004

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by Gregg Rowe

Yesterday I skied down the hills of Mont Tremblant
On a old wooden pair that was owned by Grandpa
Later in the evening we took a sleigh ride drawn by horses
As snowflakes swirled in the crystalline air

Under the evening stars we kissed to the moon
Dreams that we shared while we drank eggnog
Warmed our bodies close to the log fire
Innocence recaptured as we cuddled one another

Colourful lights twinkled in your eyes
Reflection of hope suddenly became alive
Peace on earth, joy to the world
Are phrases now that are overused

I want to go back to my boyhood days
When I was uneducated in the world's ways
Where in the morning I would arise
Jump outside and play snow angels

Go back to a time where warmth enveloped me
And presents were wrapped in glittering paper
Where Mother smiled her caring self
And Father was sitting enjoying his cigar

Where the pup was yelping and sis was stealing the popcorn
And bro was exchanging the tags on the gifts
Where relatives showed up and grandma planted a wet kiss
And grandpa gave me my first set of skis

Four decades later I have seen the world
Cried and disillusioned over the state of affairs
But today it is possible to feel what it was worth
By kissing the moon and returning to boyhood.

 






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Written December 13th, 2004

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  • lordoftherings gold member
    December 14, 2004
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    Hugh: Blame Angelica for this: I wrote a similar poem yesterday and she triggered four in a row after that with her comment, but it was great to go down memory lane. It reminds me when my grandmother used to say 'Well, in my days, I remember...' and you know what, frigging scary because at the age of forty I am starting to say that...'Well, in my days...' Merry Christmas from
    Edited on Dec 14, 2:05 p.m. because ''.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    December 14, 2004
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    Dear Gregg,
    Strange how a person's reminiscences (such as yours here) can trigger long-forgotten memories in the listener or reader of different but similar past times. It is these memories rather than the present that make the Christmas flavour so very much richer.
    Thankyou for this poem which has triggered some very dear, if distant, images for this reader. I applaud yourpoem.
    Best wishes and regards, Hugh.

  • lordoftherings gold member
    December 13, 2004
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    Without jeapordizing the short list here ...it is not a story, because there are no paragraphs and the beginning of the sentences actually sometimes start with the subject instead of a predicate. In reality, in the poetry world we call this form a narrative, close to a short story but using poetic lines instead of complete phrases with useless prepositions like 'the', 'and', and all those useless words that add useless syllables to a line and takes away the direct imagery in a narrative. Hope this is a clarification and not in any way to be construed as 'you are wrong and I am write', it is just a different form of poetry: Think Homer and 'The Illiad' or Alexander Pope with 'The Rape of The Lock'. Thank you for you comments on my poetry, I really appreciate it very much. Gregg
    Edited on Dec 13, 6:46 p.m. because ''.

  • nicole92st
    December 13, 2004
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    good job!

    This poem is really good! I love it when people make short stories! I guess you could call it a short story. I dont think it is really a poem! that is fine though, I even said short story, song, or poem! I think you are the only one who made a story. I guess you could call it a story, im not really sure what you would call it, you basically did a story. since you are the only one who made a story, I really admire that! I think you are going to be real close to the winner, I think I prefer stories! Thank you for enlighting me with your story!
    Good Luck in my contest!
    ~Nicole~


  • December 13, 2004
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    amazing

    wow this was amazing, this proves you are so talented at writing, I especially like the 3rd verse, the words were just so gorgeous. well done!


  • autumns ashes
    December 13, 2004
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    awww...this is such a sweet poem! I can sense the sentiment behind it, the yearning for days gone by. Really good, passionate piece.


  • angelica silver member
    December 13, 2004
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    OHHH Gregg, you are bringing back so many memories of Christmas when I was a child, it seemed to take forever for it to come, even though money was short, for it was the war years, my Mum always managed to have a gift there for us, it was the one day in the year when we had chicken for it was a luxury. This is wonderful for you to have these memories, you seem to treasure the good times as you get older~Love~Joan


  • December 13, 2004
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    Wow. I wish i could write good Christmas poems again. I envy your talent. Keep up the good work.


  • Jbloc Armada.
    December 13, 2004
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    i love this...this is one of the best poems i have ever read thank you so much for sharing your fond memories with us


  • SuZyCuE
    December 13, 2004
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    I Love this. Full of great images. Great write Im looking forward to reading more of your work :-)


  • American Cowgirl
    December 13, 2004
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    Aww, this is wonderful. I like the reminiscent feeling, it is very real and is well put together. Good use of images and emotion, I just thought it was great. Keep up the good work, I will be reading more.

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