The gray old mansion
was a nesting place
for pigeons,
the secret doors
the domicile of spiders,
its winding staircase
decorated with cobwebs
it filled our summers
with old age
and imagination
We rang the bell
in the afternoons,
and ran,
delicious fear of game
to peek inside
dirty streaked windows
At night we'd swear
we saw a ghost
looking from the
upstairs window
that sneered until
even our shadows ran
from one another
Gone now,
decrepit splendor
and all the stories
you told us
locked inside
the doors of our
childhood imagination
Echoes of once was have
given away
to low slung concrete
But, i remember
in my dreams
I still ring the bell
and run.
(Author's Note: The figure in the right handed window is a ghost
it is supposed to be a real haunted house)
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Written August 18th, 2002
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Well that read is going to promise me NO sleep tonight. You see we have an abandoned 2 story house across the street from me. Weeds all growing up and it just creeps me out. Thanks for the nightmares sis! LOL I'm crawling in your bed tonight if the ghost comes a calling!
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The place you describe used to be right up the street from my parents home~Since torn down to build newer homes but the lonely mansion as I called it~Spooky!!~ Awesome write Susan~Enjoyed this very much~Keep them coming~ Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Well the pic is gone...as this is a while after your origianl posting. But the write is wondeful. I remember a place like this. The place where as kids you double, triple dare to run up the porch and knock on the door! A place where as an adult, I would love to wander the rooms and inhale the musty smell of live gone by. I don't know if the ghosts would say hello to me...but I would wish them well as I left....
Hugs my friend.. really well done.
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Hi Susan, I want to see the pic' again, please! If you upload it again, it should appear!
:-) Maureen -
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Welllll...that's um..yeah not um creepy at all...nooo..
LOL. That was great, gave me goose bumps. Nice job!
*smiles* ~Jess -
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excellent write!!! I love hauntings and scary stories...I really enjoyed this piece!!! -
Trying to see how many views i can get
Thanks you all
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AWESOME write girlie...and a kick butt pic. =D -
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Great poem...we had a house in the neighborhood like this and we acted the same way. -
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Oh, FE if you love Native American music, you should listen to Joanne Shenandoah and Mary Youngblood, they are GREAT!! Saw them at an Indian Arts Festival 2 yrs. ago...Joanne's latest cd, Eagle Cries, is so haunting, her vocals...
I wrote a poem inspired by it (I forget the name of my poem) lol...but her songs are based on actual happenings...she's one of the few Native Americans I've heard sing, alot of them play flutes and drums, etc...but not alot of them sing, or in English...
She's a really nice person, too...down to Earth. All the artists I met there were nice...Mary Youngblood plays the flute...so peaceful and relaxing...I fell asleep while sitting there outside listening. :)
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Wow very good!! I loved it! I have a great interest in the paranormal, im going to perform a experiment tonight with trying to get a EVP and also some pictures, I know this old apartments we live in are not absent of ghosts. Also it is a Indian reservation that alone brings alot of paranormal energy. I trip out on one thing with that being said about the Indian Reservation, I use the term Mother Earth alot in my writes. A bit interesting if infact some messages I get could be from a old spirit of a Native American. Also the Native American music draws me in big time now. : ) -
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I'm Boo, the spooky ghost,
scaring you is what I do most
haunting stupid mortals
from beyond Death's portal
I'm whiter than a sheet
I fly, but got no arms or feet
don't eat, 'cause I'm dead
there's no brain in my head
I live in old houses
with bugs and mouses
Casper and me are friends
we make you pee in your Depends!
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Well, I'll be darned...if you look directly over the house, right smack in the center, there's something in a circle...which to me looks like a bird with wings or some kind of thing (ghost perhaps?) with its arm out, waving!! :) YOOHOOO!! I'm Booboo, the spooky ghost, hello all you mortals...I'm gonna haunt you...nananananna...lol
I got an overactive imagination...must stop popping those painkillers, making me hallucinate...hahahhahhaha
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me too ilove this scary stuff lol
Blessings
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I don't see the image you're referring to...what post? But the one on the left, downstairs window...can't say if it's a soldier, as it's too dark, but appears to have a large/wide hat, like calvary type hat...so maybe it's a revolutionary hat...like redcoats...late 1700's, early 1800's is what I'm sensing...who knows...
I'm picking up some weird vibes...and there's alot of strange things going on above the house, where the 'skeleton' is...if they're all orbs, it's freaky...but again it's hard to tell as it's dark and a black and white photo, also too far away...and much of it is blurred...you'd need a professional ghost hunter to analyze this if not already done...but WAY COOL!!! :) I'm getting chills just looking at it...I'm super sensitive to stuff like this... -
Had to back up & re read yes i mean given away i spotted another figure on the steps standing beside what looks like a post and it looks like a ghost i right corner next to the post with weed as if it looking for something anyone else see
Sining off due to a bad migraine and errors possibly i thnin i shall promote this one (LOL)
Thanks you all
Blessings
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This is more than excellent! The vivid descriptions brought your thoughts to life. Did you mean 'given AWAY' or 'given WAY' in the 6th verse?
You visited me and asked that I visit you. Here I am! I am impressed by this one and will read more of your work.
Suggestion to people who attempt to contact the world beyond: Be careful. It's not all fun. Please be careful. We all care about each other here! : ) Karen -
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Your right lookslike a skeleton s for the buring i do believe they are orbs in fact i know so i had a pic of me at a hunted sanitorium & felt so cold there and when the pic were develped little orbs all around me as for the other figure he looks like a soldier to me i was wondering if anyone else saw this too leave
it to my cyber sister to invetigate lol
Love ya
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My gosh girl!! This is great! Cool photo, looks like it burnt down or something...But don't EVER freak me out like that...lol I see a blurred image of someone in the right window...if that's really a ghost, it is creeping me out BIG time!! So who is the one on the left? Another ghost? LOL
I will have to dig out my 'ghost' photos from the Logan Inn, the good ones vanished, but I have some with strange 'orbs' that nobody's analyzed yet, but I'm told they may be ghosts...I'll let some of you decide...lol
This was eerie...gave me shivers...spooky poem, got my attention! Nicely done. :)
Oh, I don't know if you noticed this or not, but directly above the house, next to the right corner of the house (not the corner of the photo), there is an image that looks very much like a SKELETON!! Did you see it? Take a good look, I'd be curious as to what that really is. BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! :) -
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I love stories about ghosts and haunted houses. You wrote this very well!
:-) Maureen -
Thanks You all
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Susan~~~~ -
excellent
that was awesome, i loved it, keep writing.
Blessed Be,
Magik Willow -
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So sad to think the spirit is still there waiting for something or someone to set it free... A great poem...
Hugs
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Thanks all of you
This means so much
Blessings
Susan~~~~ -
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Loved this spooky write with those delicious descriptions. Took me back.. We had an empty haunted house down the block and around the corner.. Multi storied..falling down.. and so inviting....wonderful memories.. -
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This is a good poem I love the use of description in it mad it sound cool :) -
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This is great, wish I could write story like poetry....
Check this out: Just copy and paste the address.
This is pretty neat. Apparently the owners of this house had been seeing
images and hearing voices for quite a while. They did some research and
found that a lady once lived in the house who lost her husband during the
civil war. Legend says that she used to sit at the table and look across
the fields in anticipation of her loved one returning home. He never came.
So, they say she still waits. They caught this photo of what they claim to
be her.
This one was wild and a little spooky once you find the ghost in the
picture. It took me a few seconds to find it, but when you do, it just
stands out. Like one of those optical illusions.
To save you some time, concentrate around the table. Best not to focus
too much on one spot. Look around the table and toward the window.
For added effect turn your volume up loud, there is a faint noise that goes along with the picture that was captured as well...
( My friend sent me this, enjoy!) :) :) ~ Ce ( It takes a few moments but just concentate and you will see and hear it...
http://home.attbi.com/~n9ivo/whatswrong.swf
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Awesome piece. Extremely great imagery.
Meg -
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wow - incredible piece! very tight...the photo adds a wonderful gateway into the piece - draws in the reader, keeps us focused on the 'tale'...well done! bravo! -
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Very interesting! The picture really works well with this poem!
Liked this experience. Bill Hugs -
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very good poem. gave me the creeps.xx -
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Sis this is great....well done...loved the imagery...~~~GILL~~~ -
Thanks you all i love these old spooky places myself and i love exxploring them as well got locked upstairs once here in an old haunted house in my hometown and scared the bee gees out of me but i just kept going back for more lol Still love to get out on Friday 13th and try to find that old occassional haunt
Thanks you all
Blessings
Susan~~ -
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Childhood pranks memories have just been poured all over the desk
those we teasted , those we pleased. The antics to gain affection or attention. Or the occassional tail rip. Well done. -tj- -
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Very interesting piece!
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Well done!
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great poem. i love 'decrepit splendor'. one thing: 4th verse, 'upstairs' is spelled incorrectly. that's it. i hope to read more of your work.
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