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A Woman's Pain

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“It hurts so much” I tell him

but he doesn’t understand

He thinks the pain is corporal

like the burning from a brand


I tell him it’s the emptiness

that echoes through my soul

the barren wasteland of the dreams

that make a woman whole


I’m down here on my knees

hands grasping at my heart

And he thinks a pill will fill the void

that’s tearing me apart


“It hurts so much” I tell him

as he joins me on the floor

and he begs me not to cry

this man whom I adore


But the abyss is swallowing

and I mourn my sterile womb

as the child we planned slips away

I long for my tranquil tomb


I know that he should be enough

I love him more the life

but failure slices through my breast

I submit to the thrusting knife


“It hurts so much” I tell him

but he’ll never understand

still, he gathers me close on the desolate floor

and soothes my soul with his hand



Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

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www.antoineart.com/nudes/emotionalnudes/pages/A02_comfort.htm
Written December 12th, 2004

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  • requiempoet gold member
    December 18, 2004
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    I started crying when i read that. I'm sorry, it is powerfully written, and the situation is heart wrenching!!


  • Ancientson
    December 13, 2004
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    Wonderful!

    So sorrowfully insightful, and so fluidly written.

    My heart goes ou to you.


  • Faded silver member
    December 13, 2004
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    This is a wonderful, sophisticated poem. I am not sure if I relate to this (and therefore enjoy this) more because I am a woman and I understand that pain, that emptiness which can only be completed with a child and that hollowness when one realises that they are to be without.
    Aside from the main echoes in this poem, you touched lightly upon some other issues... the alienation as the one you love cannot udnerstand, and also the distinction between pain as a physical, curable and fading feeling to the defeaning pain of emptiness... and the tendancy for men to always try to tackle pain as though it were physical! I love the fact that you do not dismiss you're love entirely in the poem, and find yourself allowing to be comforted in the final stanza.
    ~faded

  • AlArIsE
    December 13, 2004
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    Brings tears to my eyes, I would wish this pain on no one and you described it so wonderfully and desperately, the repetition is very effective to help the reader to feel the same crucifying pain that this person is being ripped apart by. Great job.


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    December 13, 2004
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    Yes this is a true story. I'm glad that it moved you. Patti


  • nakedlyrics
    December 13, 2004
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    great

    this piece is completely full on and sad, its right up in my face , i love it! i dont know if this is true or not but a very powerful write! thanks for the great read- goodluck with the rest of your work i look foward to reading some more poems from you in the near future have fun- hope your ok if its true

  • cea0216
    December 13, 2004
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    This poem really touched me in ways unimaginable. The sadness and the pain is evident in each of your words. It brought tears to my eyes. This kind of loss is one that can effect a woman in ways that no man can really understand to the fullest only because they are unable to experiance it. It was a gripping and moving peice that was wonderfully written. I think you did a wonderful job expressing your emmotions. It rendered me utterly speechless, and I really had to read it a couple of times to let it all sink in. Great write!


  • -Reality-
    December 13, 2004
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    ... This was...Amazing.. Powerful.. Heart-wrenching.. It made me think, and feel what you were saying. =/.. Some pain is hard to soothe- and all you can do is hold on to a person you love, pain or not..

    Write on, stay strong
    Kami


  • Ashley Mosely
    December 12, 2004
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    awww gosh
    this is very powerful
    i hope u read this to him
    it's touching in that you know
    he is trying to help you and does
    the best he can
    you have perfect rhyming and structure

    ash

  • jenninlyon88
    December 12, 2004
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    amazing

    the flow was like silk rolling over my tongue. i love this poem. its so filled with beauty and emotion. it is so beautiful and real. thank you.

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