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Worth

 

guys like girls with slender hips
guys like girls with talented lips
throw in a teasing glance and a coy smile
then they'll decide you're worth their while

 

put on make-up and curl your hair
that's the only way they'll notice you're there
slide on some heels and a sexy skirt
then lick your lips and prepare to flirt

 

first he'll glance from head to toe
his eyes will light up, and then you'll know
soon he'll make his move on you
and there's nothing else that you can do

 

guys like girls that start as a tease
guys like girls that want to please
and when that is all that you're good for
they won't want you for anything more

Author notes

Just a little something I've noticed...
Written December 11th, 2004

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  • Barbie
    December 20, 2004
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    Just, wow! I never ever leave comments like this and I apologise for doing so. Have my applause. Barbie. Xx


  • December 12, 2004
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    no problem

  • Cyane
    December 12, 2004
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    it did, and thank you very much for your comment :-)


  • December 11, 2004
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    argh I don't know if my applause worked..


  • December 11, 2004
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    This actually make me chuckle a bit..because every element in the poem is true. People expect others to just want a material or fake thing, and that's it. They just want to experiance pleaure and hope others will give it to them no matter what..especially with boys. This is a great poem, it strips things down to the bone.
    Great job

  • Gogetalife
    December 11, 2004
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    very nice piece my freind..good words and good rhyming..not boring at all..wonderfull write..keep it up..

  • Moonless night
    December 11, 2004
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    I love this. Most times what you have said is so true. also I love the rhyming you used. It wasn't a bore!! Keep up the good work. Have fun and write more.

  • moonlitclover
    December 11, 2004
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    aww, you even worked in my "in"! gosh that sounds awkward...anyway, fabulous work here, as always. i'm always happy to see you pick up your pen again; but i'd be a fool not to enjoy something new by one of my favorite writers, now wouldn't i?
    boys are dumb, this is wonderful, i need to write something, i hate my life at this point in time, boys are dumb, and you're a very gifted writer. have i left anything out? i don't believe so...


  • painted veil
    December 11, 2004
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    Well I usually don't like rhyming poems but you've written quite an exception. it's lyrical but so serious that it's really worth reading. your language flows so well, and no 'halfway' rhyming (YES!) This was really good, and the last lines are almost haunting because with some people- that is the exact reality of the whole situation. cheers, kat

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