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You(luv version)

A random smile each minute
Till I fade out the world
And remember that moment
That last time I saw your face
The reflection of my eyes in yours
The feeling that rushed the blood to my head
For a brain freeze to erupt
And make the blushing appear
The  breeze of you walking by
With the smell of yours scenting my vision
Only things I could remember till you re-appear

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Written December 11th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • troubledgurl101
    January 24, 2005
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    this is really good great job keep up the good work! and good luck
    nicole


  • December 17, 2004
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    kickass

    one word- awesome
    i love it, it reminds me of me and my ex when i first layed eyes on her..


  • miss-nikki-michele
    December 12, 2004
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    Awe...this is so sweet. I love this. The way you capture the essence of love is amazing and I truly love it....Great Job and good luck in the contest.
    XoXo
    NiKKi