*My world so peaceful and nice
No war or terrorism
Only water swifting on shore
With only the words of truth being said
No competition
To declare a piece of land yours
Only owned by the sky and the sea
No difference in the people
All same except the corrupted minds
To be perfect is out of question
But to be civil is not*
Author notes
This is basically my world...well ideal world...no racism no poverty explaned enough by the poem...no terrorism, no hate life is like a calm ocean each day after another without wars...perfect world we lie so far away
Written December 11th, 2004
A contest entry
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300 points, ended January 29, 2005, 38 entries
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I like the last two lines, it doesn't cost anything to be civil does it! Great poem.
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thanx
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nice was well deserved *rav*
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Only owned by the sky and the sea
i found this line very um well..i cant find the word now. bleh
but i think its my favourite one form the whole uh poem.
it sounds so like..free..likethere is no worries in the world, not ugly buildings and roads...just beautiful nature the sky and the sea
To be perfect is out of question
But to be civil is not this ending is great!
and its true when you think about it...we must try to be civil
maybe we will be one stepp closed to perfection
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lol u have a spelling error
"pierce of land" hehe piece?
I love the last four lines they totally capture a truth that many people seem to forget. Noones perfect but there are so many damn rude people lol
great write... ideal world too
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