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Yore

 

It could have been yesterday

 

or eons ago.

 

There’s no way to stop

 

time or its flow.

 


We often speak

 

of “the days of yore.”

 

It’s the time that’s elapsed

 

since the time of before.

 


It’s hard to define

 

such an infinite word

 

that’s used to convey

 

“it’s already occurred.”

 


There’s no turning back

 

and undoing the past;

 

we can study and learn

 

and its lessons are vast.

 


So think hard how you want

 

your story recorded

 

and make sure your decisions

 

are much weight afforded.

 


Do you want to be

 

when your epoch is told;

 

the one who is scorned

 

or the one who’s extolled?

 


Tomorrow is looming

 

so this I implore…

 

When you make your decisions

 

think about “yore.”

 



Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

December 11, 2004

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"What is the weight of a solitary word?" This was a hard word for me to sink my teeth into... but here it what I came up with.  I hope it fits the contest.  Patti
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  • Cutieindahurley
    January 2, 2005
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    Well written & Great word usage!

    This is awesome, I love the words you chose to utilize and the rhythem is really cool. Awesome work!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 22, 2004
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    A very good poem. Nice flow and rhymes and a structure as well. Thanks for entering and best of wishes as well... ~genielassie~


  • Zahhar gold member
    December 21, 2004
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    neat. "yore" is one of those words that does seem to take seat in the mind.

    it also has a lot of neat rhymes [lore, fore, soar, etc.].

    you've taken the tone of admonition with your poem, making this a didactic piece of writing. it is pretty difficult to write a successful piece of didactic poetry because of the human being's inherent reactiveness to being told what to do.

    i think your poem here does alright with this tone because it's not overly pushy.

    one thing that strikes me about the content are the lines "so think hard how you want your story recorded"... my immediate mental response to this was, "as if it even will be recorded! hah!" i find myself doubting that my existence will amount to much, or that my words will carry enough weight to affect much...

    also, there are those who have gone before who are very much "extolled" who have lived a life hardly worthy of praise. so many old-growth redwood groves are named after people who were directly funding the deforestation of the old growth trees for the profit they would gain.

    as i finished your poem, i found myself thinking, "let my name remain as obscure as it is today, but let my words, just my words, live ten thousand years."

  • Namelessmoon
    December 17, 2004
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    This is a great poem! I loved it a lot how you describe the word, and the ryming of the poem was great. Well done on this.


  • Balldinger silver member
    December 17, 2004
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    Living in the days of yore...

    An outstandingly crafted poem dealing with a difficult topic. Your rhyme and meter are enviable. This is the second excellent poem in this contest I've read in the last 30 minutes - remarkable! Well done!


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    December 16, 2004
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    "Yore" is an archaic word, I think it means "yesterday" or "days of old" or something like that (I'm not entirely certain, please don't kill me, lol) and I got the idea that one can reach for the stars and beyond eternities in the future, but must always remember where they have had to come from to get to the point they are now and the past, no matter how saddening or painful that may be. Besides, if we did not learn from our yesterdays, how could we know what to do in our tomorrows? This poem holds a lot of knowledge and I adore that. There aren't too many opportunities these days where you find a poem that teaches you something.

    What perfect placing of words, too. An astounding piece.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    December 15, 2004
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    Thank you I fixed it. I don't know why I keep doing that... but I'm blaming it on the cold I've been fighting for weeks. Patti


  • Keith
    December 15, 2004
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    Nice, bouncy little poem, with a lot of creative thought. Just to be picky - it's lessons are vast has a misplaced apostrophe. Jars a bit, as you punctuation is otherwise perfect, and you've got a nice rhyme and rhythmic flow. Blythe Yuiltide tae ye. Guid luck.


  • M.A.King
    December 14, 2004
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    You did this perfectly. You gave a depth and clarity to the definition that far surpassed what I could have imagined. Placing it in time and space and giving an astounding view. This certainly does give weight and meaning. Excellent.

  • Michael 54
    December 11, 2004
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    Nice work Patti, great rhyme and meter. I wish you luck in the contest. Take care and God bless.

    Michael


  • BeautifulContradiction
    December 11, 2004
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    This was neat!
    Nice rhyme and flow, as well as cute, whitty, and thoughtful content.


  • xxScarlet-Nightsxx
    December 11, 2004
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    This is pretty cool! i like it! keep it up! X

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