I want to remember you and smile, but my tears are too heavy for my lips
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Written December 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- one liners (un paquebots) by fall into me.
400 points, ended December 16, 2004, 92 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hey. A few months ago, you entered a one-liners contest. This is an offical invitation to join my own one-liners contest listed under the contest title JoinThisContestOrI'llPutAMobHitOnYourWholeFamily. I hope you choose to enter!-Curtis Meyer
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as if the statement you have stated couldnt be simpler. as if it couldnt have been said better. yet, it was. great job. keep up the good work
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wow i like this one to. very good. julie
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how very poignant. The most talented of all art is elegant in its execution, and does not most readily subscribe to length, but power in its delivery.
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neat; with lots of unsaid words and hinted meanings - skilful indeed. a powerful one-liner.
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Hmm... interesting thought. It proves you can say much with few words.
--Elizabeth
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o this is good
it takes alot to express yourself amd make a point in such short lines. i have tons of these things, called epigrams.
you did very weel with this line.
it takes talent to express yourself well in such short context and you pulled it off well.
there are not to many ppl who can do this.
very clever and again bittersweet.
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WOW.... potency. I can only sum it up with one of my own...
The power of few o'erwelms the might of the many. -
nice one linear, it hard to make one linears and you did it PERFECTLY ^_^
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With just one line you have provoked alot of emotion! this is very well written and makes me feel the emotion that you have presented with this poem...Nice Job!
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this was really good and very true, great piece!
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thats cool! great job.
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