Dixie wears her heart on her sleeve
when she wears sleeves, which, in Dixie's case
isn't very often,
she likes to leave things bare, so that men
don't really need to use imagination
she finds them easier to manipulate that way
if they know whats in store for them, in the first place
she doesn't have much work to do
Dixie's moods vary, and match the frequent color of her eyes
and i, i think i notice them most, when they change
but then, i notice most everything Dixie does
i cant help it, she, she drives me into untold fits
that i keep hidden to the dark, or else
express, when plied with JD and golds
she is fathomless and i still, even to this day
cant figure her out
I'd like to be with her, to fuck her
to maul her past oblivion
where i cant' figure out what she is
but, i know, i know that wont happen
Dixie likes her men, her big and strong men
with cocks, 10 inches long,
and she likes to moan, when they fill her
hard and robust like,
and i can't compete with that, how can i
i lack the obvious parts that she wants
fuck, i can't even begin to fathom how she'd like it
hard, and rough, up from behind
i cant, cant stop imagining her,
with her hair in plaits, while they fuck her from behind
the men, those men, that she picks up from the bar
all of them
and i hate her for it, but i cant,
cant stop loving her
wont, even, because i need her, to fulfill
this small little piece of me
and i hate that
Nyx...
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okay, im really drunk, ims orry
Written December 10th, 2004
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only if you lend a hand.
or two
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I like the fact that her eyes change color. It gives her a very otherworldly feel (and satisfies my gripe =P). There is a lot to this one and I am thinking I like it very much when you write drunk. There is nothing to apologize for here. It's genius, lack of apostrophes and all. The desperation and resignation and adoration are glorious.
You should jack off to her. It could be fun, but only if you tell me about it later.
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you kno me lovey, i dont particularly bother with sentence syntax. it's boring. if you understand what i mean, then it's all good.
no heat of the moment, since well, dixies a figment of my imagination and ...i never jack off to dixie.
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In this line 'if they know whats in store for them, in the first place' 'whats' would be 'what's'
In this line 'cant figure her out' 'cant' would be 'can't'
In this line 'where i cant' figure out what she is' 'cant'' would be 'can't'
In this line 'but, i know, i know that wont happen' 'wont' is 'won't'. From what I hear from a person better at punctuation than I am there wouldn't be a comma after 'but'.
In this line 'i cant, cant stop imagining her,' 'cant' is 'can't' and 'cant' is 'can't.
In the last verse 'cant' - 'cant' and 'wont' are 'can't' 'can't' and 'won't'.
I only mention the apostrophes because you use them in some words but not in others, I don't feel that is on purpose, I just feel it may have been in the heat of the moment.
You do know there's a such thing as a strap-on, try that sometime.
Erotically sound piece, a good piece that you have written here.
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Duality has its advantages, but also its serious drawbacks...to grasp one all too often exposes the other, and to grasp the inherent conflict, potentially jeopardizes both...
This piece is certainly fascinating, as is the entire series (or at least what I've read so far)...
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no need for apologies.
This one is interesting.
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