In a perfect world
there is no perfection.
To feel joy
one must have sorrow.
To experience excitement
one must get bored.
To know Love
one must have lived without.
So, I guess this world
is perfect...
...but it could be better!
Author notes
Written December 9th, 2004
A contest entry
- Your perfect world by .
500 points, ended December 16, 2004, 12 entries
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i like this!! its true lol, and good job!
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guess again.
i did not open this contest to help you, and how was i supposed to know you are new?
in this contest i see which poems/worlds i like and which i dont.
and i liked yours.
so i dont know what you are complaining about. -
Blind Voice, I do not know if you were being sarcastic (and a bit snotty) but it sounded that way. I would think a poet would understand my point, especially since I am new at this. Being new at this brings me to my next point. The middle of my poem may not be original, but I fealt it was necessary to make my point at the end. Being new at this, I am very much looking for help and constructive criticism. I did not see any of that in your comments. Thank you for your support. (If by chance I took your comments the wrong way, then I apologize; but I do not think I am.)
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well
i actyually must agree with what you say..
and i find the points you raise quite interesting and a bit mindboggling..
To feel joy
one must have sorrow.
To experience excitement
one must get bored.
To know Love
one must have lived without.
how did u ever come up with that?
well apart from common sense...
however if this world is perfect like you say
then it cant be better can it now?
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