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He’s not your ordinary man

He’s not your ordinary man

he swirls my soul

and rainbows shatter

into crystal kaleidoscopes


Colors fragment

fostering bliss

as his fingers linger

in voids and hollows


He fills the emptiness

lustful lips graze

feasting eagerly

upon willing flesh


Time shifts

boundless seconds

rain-dance gloriously

quenching my spirit


He captivates me

hungry eyes devour

the secrets of my soul

washing them clean


I fly free

as hearts and bodies fuse

and stars shatter

pierced by his love


He’s not your ordinary man.



Patricia Gibson-Williams

December 9, 2004

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Written December 9th, 2004

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  • twinklestart
    March 16, 2005
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    this is awesome! it really shows how you feel about your man! i hope you did good in the contest. this has great wording and good, short little phrases, which in this case, worked for the better, rather than long phrases. if you normally do long phrases, then you know when short phrases work better. if you normally do short phrases... well then you're good at it!


    ~Addie~


  • Touchof1der silver member
    December 10, 2004
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    Very sexy and sensuous writing. A true delight forthe literary palette as well as the sensory perception of the brain that allows us to see the wonderful imagery created by your words. Great Job! Good luck in the contest.
    ~Kimberly


  • iccara
    December 10, 2004
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    this is very unique and has great imagery.. good luck in the poem.. a true winner either way ~iccara~

  • sweetrevenge55
    December 9, 2004
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    man thats hott! got me all thinking hehe lol your imagery was great, and your imagination is crazy! i hope to read more of your work! meanwhile keep up the good work love ya chelle