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obedience

Child of obedience, confusion sits upon your face

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Written December 8th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • movedon
    October 21, 2008
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    short and sweet

    cliche i know, but its what came to mind when i read this


    Mylee

  • K-Dense
    February 19, 2005
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    Hey. A few months ago, you entered a one-liners contest. This is an offical invitation to join my own one-liners contest under the contest title JoinThisContestOrI'llPutAMobHitOnYourWholeFamily. Hope to see you submit!-Curtis Meyer
    PS Please feel free to read any/all poetry posted on this site by k-dense (myself).


  • Orenji No Taiyou
    December 13, 2004
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    Awww Tear
    Too Often I Have Found The Line Fall True For Me
    Kudos To You


  • kidwithgun silver member
    December 10, 2004
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    true. i just found out what Flotsam and Jetsam mean. very deep. i like it. but i won't tell anyone if they don't know.


  • shastadaisey123
    December 9, 2004
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    wonderful.........so full of emotions.....

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