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Quiescent Alienation.

Thy's time hath offered myself death so sweet.
Wouldst     thou       still         care...
Whether to bare thy's love and benumb my heart.
Thou art a temptress, my mind and soul bequeath,
Listening to thy's tears, they fall, to our distraught.
These tears which paint the world a blinding white,
Those diamonds, which are a rare but precious sight,
In,which one day,          One day n'er so far,
Return, We must, these perfect scars.
The scars Love's slaughter hath brought.
And which time hath offered a life so real,
But more false than dreams canst be sought,
And dreams of life, and kisses that be always sealed.

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...In Memory Of that Special person.
Written December 8th, 2004

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  • Corpse-Groom
    December 8, 2004
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    ...thank you it means a good deal to me that someone actually likes it. *thanks*


  • ecnamor
    December 8, 2004
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    This poem is deep, and I absolutely love the way you write. It's wonderful. This poem is wonderful. Your writing is wonderful!!! Keep writing more like this! It's beautiful!