Close up my tongue
It speaks my heart
As words begun
Tore them apart.
Shelter the spill
Loves lonely cry
Still waiting until
Torn lips can lie.
Bleed crimson sins
Scream out inside
Mouths parting begins
But suddenly died.
Go on believe
Say I don’t care
I’m glad to deceive
Your blinding stare.
Silence can stay
Can’t know what’s true
For my heart would say
How it loves you.
Author notes
Yes I am alive lol, I just havent been online as much, and Ive been having writers block big time, as if you cant tell from this lol.
Written December 7th, 2004
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Very Good
Okay...So this is my first time reading something of yours and I am so glad I did...Wow...This is truly an amazing write...I have read the previous comments made and if this is the result of writers block then I am amazed even more...You brought out your feelings and it spoke to me...Thanks for sharing your poetry with us on AP...
Much Love
Tessa -
GREAT!!!
OMG! I have never been able to not like your poems. I know you weren't on for a while, but it's always worth the wait. I lvoe all of your poems. THis one really good as well. My favorite part was:
Shelter the spill
Loves lonely cry
Still waiting until
Torn lips can lie.
Another great write. Good job!
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Great Work
DAMN I WISH I COULD WRITE LIKE THIS!! Well, write like this lately, I've been blocked and trying some thing new like stories. But any way this is about you not me. Good freakin work! I understand the emotion behind this and the mood. Bravo and all that stuff!! -
I love your imagery. I swear, you have the best imagery on AP. ^^ It's true. ^_~ Thank you for the treat, there are some wonderful paintings in my mind right now. Although I like the last one slightly more, I think this one has better imagery. So pretty... *-*
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*big hug* i missed you! writers block sucks but not this poem. back to your wonderful poems again
. i miss reading them. amazing job!
love,Christal -
Beautiful piece, i'm glad to see you writing again. I liked the idea of you asking your lips to lie, for you know they will only speak the truth of your heart in which you wish to keep silent. Your 'block' has decieved you though, for this is truly an excellent outbreak.
Kate
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Well im glad to see one of your poems again...i missed reading them...and i hope ur hanging in there...
...keep ur head up...and keep writing... ...
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wow thats really good i like it alot keep up the good work *cough* write more *cough* lol just 4 my specail injoyment...wow i sound like a B*i*t*c*h there...im sry....f*u*c*k now i feel bad...o well even more of a b*i*t*c*h wow im specail...neway ya ur really good i liked it alot *props*
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10/10
You're still one of the better angst writers I know. Quite a nice flow. Keep writing.
I've been wondering where you've been...welcome back.
And thanks for the comments on my haiku. -
..you just don't know what this one means to me right now.. I'm going to print this one out and put it in my favorite poems binder. Man I love your stuff..
Much Monkey Lovin
Conni -
this has such an amazing flow to it. i love it. but most of all i love the meaning and emotion in it. Its hard when you try to lie to yourself, try not to tell the truth about the love you have for someone...been there done that. well anyway, AWESOME poem <3
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Sad But Beautiful
This is a result of writers block? Hopefully you have writers block more often, because this is awesome! I really like this. It's sad, as usual, but beautiful, as usual. I am glad you posted something, your writings are purely amazing. Keep writing, will you? Love this. BYE! -
oH, I love the first lines, the truth of it...how I can't help myself from telling the truth, my heart controls my mouth...not my conciousness and brain...wow, this is good.
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