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Living

Every time we are together
It all comes rushing back
Not just alive but really living
One with such beauty, I'm taken aback

When I say beauty I don't mean her outer
Though that description would be precise
But it is overshadowed by her inner
Such a beauty, on its own, would entice

Put together they create perfection
And, amazingly, she is all mine
But, more importantly I am all hers
A Love that is truly divine

Then, in an instant, it all disappears
I have awaken to realize
That again I am no longer living
And I must return to real life

We once had a life together
But we were young, what else could we do
So we parted, our paths were much different
All I could do was stumble my way through

So I pray each night I'll be dreaming
And those dreams reunite me and you
For I am living only while sleeping
And awake, my life I just rue

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Written December 7th, 2004

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  • Abscessed
    December 7, 2004
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    wow this one is a great write! a lot of emotion and a lot of regret. i especially liked the part where you write about 'returning to real life'...it gives the poem that extra something.
    thank you for entering the contest!