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Together

You have chosen me through the stary night
Pointed a laser to be yours
From day to day we dance the music of love
Celebrating our closeness
Being envied by the world
I feel the only way to escape, is love
Every lie digging its deep path
To show the fog is clearing up
We are meant to be together forever

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Do you care? and Weak will not work...
Written December 6th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • ClarinetNut2006
    December 10, 2004
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    Very beautiful. No words can express how you feel in this poem.. Good job!
    ~*Keys*~


  • As Autumn Falls
    December 8, 2004
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    "Being envied by the world" What a beautiful feeling that must be. D These poems of yours are so short, yet so expressive, so... wonderful. So far these make me happy.

    ~all 28~

  • Gleto Orica
    December 8, 2004
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    Beautimous!!!

    Forgot...
    Fine tune the strings of Life,
    and Live/Play/Sing the songs of Love...
    Recycle your shoes...
    Kinda-Sorta-Not-Maybe-Ya-No-Huh!?!...

    AngelSnot...

  • Gleto Orica
    December 8, 2004
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    FantabulousTogether!!!

    Beauty as poetry can only be expressed...very nice...very nice...liking this extrememly well...no words for critique...it's what it seems it should be...emotional, honest...hopeful...pure...short, sweet, to the point...they should care...if you can write as this, your heart must shine as bliss-ful wishes, every day...take care...God Bless...
    Bugs & Phishes
    's & 's
    's & Wishes
    RollyPollies & Me!
    ~Glet rica/C. L. Brandon K.~
    AngelSnot...