I'm all alone in this darkness
That you've left me in
I keep wondering why you disappeared
Why you wanted to
I know you hated yourself
But hatred doesn't take the pain away
It will never vanish
I find myself thinking of you often
Even though you've vanished
And I remember how I still care
How much I miss you
Under the night sky, the illumination
The wind drowns out my soft whisper
When I call your name
And I know you'll never hear me
But I keep calling softly
Possibly hoping that you will return
But I know you never will
And my tears sparkle like stars
Emptiness seems to overtake me
But I still smile when I think of that night
It repeats over and over in my head
And I know how much you meant to me
I loved you so much as a friend
And I look up into the night sky
Wishing I could see you again...
Author notes
Inspired by a song called Hoshi No Suna (Star Dust) by Gackt, among other things...
Written December 6th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Passion by Kinky Lil Devil.
300 points, ended April 12, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I don't know what you mean by a little off, but thank you.
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I feel your pain. this poem was good i love the background!!! it made me laugh and giggle
but it was slightly distracting from the poem but i still like it hell i'd use it all the time now the pome it's self was good but it seemed a lil off at some points but it was still good
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tamara, thank you for your comment. I'm glad you liked this. It is rather sad. It was inspired by a song I used to listen to a lot. Good luck with judging.
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wow this i felt was sad i really love the way that you have writen this it flows so freely nice poem n good luck!
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Thank you for you comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this and could relate. It's always hard losing someone you care about, but this was more inspired by a song I listened to a lot at one time. And thank you for the compliment.
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great write, i erally liked it. it has the tone of somethings i write. I kno how it feels to lose someone that u love, im sorry that u had to go through that. Good luck in the contest.Nice name by the way,
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Lovely write. The sadness just lingers on, like a book that you didn't finish reading. Nicely penned.
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thanks for entering my contest.
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I'm really glad that you liked it so much. I had a feeling it was the right one to enter and now it finally has a comment. :3 Thanks for giving it the first comment. Glad you enjoyed it enough to want to.
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Wow, this is beautiful! I love the imagery and the emotion was so sincere that I felt it too. All of your thoughts and feelings were so easy for me to understand. You wrote like a true poet and I loved every minute of it. You did an excellent job on this and it was well worth the read. Thank you for sharing but even more for entering my contest
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