Almost I can touch you with my eyes
and sink between your magnificent thighs
with each stroke of your manhood I've come to know
the taste of honey that gently flows
Your blood is warm like heaven's touch
your devilish smile I treasure much
You've stunned and seduced me with your charms
I'm spellbound within your muscular arms
I’m hypnotized in sweet harmonious bliss
immobilized by your savory kiss
If I could touch you with my beating heart
the joy of love for us would not depart
In the quiet whispers of the night
you stroke my breast by candlelight
from the dance of the shadows on the wall
our breath rise steadily and again would fall
The passionate longing of our untamed hearts
the intensity that true love imparts
the firm smooth caresses of your ebony skin
your strong determination to venture in
the heat of your nakedness pressed to mine
your tongue as sweet as flavoured wine
throughout the night we search and explore
a world which we’ve been waiting for
we’ll quench the hunger and fan the flames
and with each stroke I utter your name
and you in answering would inwardly moan
a deep satisfaction, a lover's groan
as we dance and sway to the beat of love
our bodies soaring like two elegant doves
Tears of fulfillment flow from our cheeks
for you and I have reached our peak
drenched in perspiration and lost in flight
we’ll hold each other and kiss goodnight
Author notes
Nice contest, I could sink my teeth into it. I know you will plenty of great poems.
Written December 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Alright bring on the erotic poems by poets delight.
300 points, ended October 17, 2005, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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loverly
Well written! This flows well. I am usually not a patron of a rhyming poem, however yours is one of the best I have ever read. I will definately read more of your work! keep writing! -
Thank you Disillusioned1, I felt the heat when writing it
Avril
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I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem, I'll be by later to return the favour. Avril
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Thank you LolaUnscripted, I have to check yours out also, send me an IM for the title of your poem, I would love to check it out. Your comments really brightened my day and I will be sure to return the favour. Avril
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Wow, omg i really REALLY liked this poem. It was soooo hot without being trashy. Great job! Really, really good. Stiff competition
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I love it too! you surly win!! no doubts lol it's so similar to mine....hadnt even know about your poem til today...I guess great minds do think alike lol
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Excellent piece! So sensual and erotic. Your rhyming and imagery make this piece so vivid and hot! I love it...Thank you for entering and good luck
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Thank you Amun, I appreciate your applause and comments. Avril
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wow!! simply amazing, very discriptive. I felt like i was there, great write keep up the great work and good luck!
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Intelligent, very. More about sex than love.
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Thank you my darling. Love is always better the second time around.
Avril
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Romanticly Erotic
Sister Avril! This is one sizzling piece of work. The canvas is in flames and the words are scorching hot!
I was right there with you as I read each line day dreaming.
You felt so deliciously good baby. The heat of our bodies love dancing in erotic bliss was off the hissel fo shissel!
I loved it baby! We have got to reenact this one sweetie.
Lights! Camera! Action!
Bravo!!! Encore! Encore!
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This is just dripping with sensuality! The images you create for us readers.. Applause! The poem dances to such a deliteful beat! Just fluently flowing rhythym!
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~Awesome~
Wow! I love this and it is so vivid
! It is truly beautiful and it flows wonderfully. Your description is captivating and I can't wait to read more of your work! Thanks~ (i would applaud but i have no points!)
~Abigail
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Thank you Anglique, such a pretty name. I really appreciate your kind sincere words. Avril
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Just like one of those perfect love scenes.. this is so beautiful.. I dont think I have ever read anything so passionate and so full of love in my life..
great job
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this is a really good piece of work. i can really relate with it. claps for you i would applaud you work but i am saving up points so i can host a contest. you keep up all the great work thank you for giving us poetry lovers some thing to read that is actually worth the time it takes to read it. some of the poems on this site aren't even worth reading it is very reassuring to know there are still poets out there that know how to write. you know it is amazing to me that humans have writen so many poems and none of them are the same.to me anyone who can write a poem that has never been writen before has some talent. but if they cam write some thing new that is still good even though it seems that all the good poems have been taken (lol you know what i mean)then they have a lot of talent. so any way you keep up the good work you have so much potental(or however you spell it)don't let it fade away
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Thankyou so very much Poetry Within, I thought i'de try a little something different and I was very pleased the way it came out. Glad you enjoyed it and yes go on and call your husband up and have some fun Lol. Avril
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oh my! this is spellbounding! makes me wanna call up my husband at work and tell him to come home!! lol beautiful avril somply mesmeric with each passing rhyme i was held captive in a stunned trance riding upon your words.
you've outdone yourself once more, i love thie peice,it is one of my favorites i think,it eminds me of my own life and i can relate so well. much love to you and darell.
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Thank you so much ForgottenPage, I sure do appreciate your comments and applause and when you first time comes around, hope that it will be even more beautiful and romantic than my poem was. Avril
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This has wonderful imagery in it.An incredeibly beautiful poem.Haha,maybe my first time will be like this,one can only hope.Anyway,an amazing write.Hope to see more soon.
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absolutley beautiful... i love the feeling of having something still be so new, no matter how much time that may have passed... i hope your love only continues to grow... thank you so much for sharing...
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Thanks Pasti6, I sure am happy that you enjoyed my poem. Your thoughtful comments were very much appreciated. Avril
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wow! this poem was very addictive. I usually dont like poems like these, but your words were so softly written i enjoyed it so much! the rhyming was perfect and was never forced. the flow was marvolous. This is deffintly by far the best poem ive read on this site in weeks. you have so much talent here.
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Wow, thats really sweet! Your poem kept me in the whole way through!! Great poem!!!
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I agree with ssmee in the way this poem leaves me, Yup! Ray's at work!
I am so ready to be held after reading this stunning word-art! Yes, yes, and YES!!! I can so relate to every word of this. We are so blessed to have men that we adore and adore us in the same. Exquisite poem! Very nicely written. Sensuous, sultry, and yes fresh, cleverly written erotica. I love the line;
I’m hypnotized in sweet harmonious bliss
immobilized by your savory kiss
Yes! Ray's lips are such honey sweet to me! Girl, girl, girl... This is great!
HAVE A BLESSED CHRISTMAS AND A PROSPEROUS NEW YEAR
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This is a beautifuly written story. Full of emotion and love in each word. It flows nicely and leaves me in the mood to go cuddle with my hubby ;-)
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Great looking out Raven, Illustrious is a very common word in greek mythology. I thought it would fit in but alas now I know it doesn't but then again my Darell does have famous arms to me at least . I appreciate your thoughtful comments and applause.
All my love,
Avril (Big Sister)
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Well, if you were like me, a free agent with seemingly no one to love, I would've been stunned at your poetic genius. But alas, we all know what inspired this poem! (hey, not bad for a first attempt at erotica!)
I have a couple of suggestions for you. The opening line of this poem confused me a little because of the wording: "I most can touch you with my eyes". First, did you mean to say almost? And second, it would be (at least to me) a little clearer if you said I can almost touch you with my eyes.
My second suggestion comes to the line that reads "I'm spellbound within your illustrious arms". To my understanding, the word illustrious means 'famous' or 'brightly shining' (though the latter definition is obsolete), and no one has ever had famous arms, now have they?
I don't know what to suggest to put in it's place, maybe "enthralling", since you said you were spellbound.
Otherwise than that, I really have no complaints... I thought it was a beautifully flowing poem, with much heat and passion building as I kept reading. Absolutely gorgeous!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora (little sister)
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Sin' sational!!!*wink*:f
Oh My lord!!! Avril, this passionate display of affection in the aftermath of loves reflection is a beautiful oddessy of rapture. I couldn't help but to reminisce as I lapped and sucked in every sweet and sultry line. You are a Poets poet and a monumental treasure! I love loving you baby! Yes, and that's very personal. You make your man so proud! I salute you my beautiful "Ebony Queen!"
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Lol! I couldn't agree with you more and I so appreciate your wonderful comments to my poem. I'm not really accustomed to writing erotica but I thought I'de give it a try and I'm sure glad that I did. Thanks again and God bless. Avril
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What a masterpiece of love you have here Seems to be a lot of erotic writes lately. I just finished commenting on one and he said he had an 8 incher..gee, if you're going to embellish..why not make it a 10 incher ? This was romantic/erotic and done with taste - Bravo on this one!
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Why thank you ever so much PurpleSky and yes, I am one happy woman and I thank God for that. All my best to you, Avril
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I dont usualy read this stuff bu tyou did this pretty tastefully so I kept reading
sounds to me like you are one happy woman wishing you the best in love
love and hugs
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Thank you so much Little-Lovah, I've managed to leave myself breathless too Lol! Avril
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This is beautiful! You described everything perfectly anf indeed left me breathless in the end and amazed! Great work!
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Hey Dee, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I know if anyone can relate to it, it's you. Keep the blue black purple love flowing. Lol. and
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Aaaaaaaav! I can't believe you have been peeking through my window Did you see how I work it? You KNOW I can relate to this, all this passionate love blue black purple has been giving me. Suddenly I'm reminded of how long it's been. I will be sure to take care of that.
I am always amazed at the beauty of your words. Thanks foor sharing such a passionate write.
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Awww Joyce, thankyou. Your comments are so sweet i'm blushing besides myself. I guess you can say this is my first hot romantic poem. I really enjoyed writing it and I know that Darell will also enjoy the read. Thanks again Joyce, All my love ~Avril~
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well if i didn't already know you were in love,this would surely convince me.pure love drips from the lines not to mention the passion.the flow is very seductive and the rhymes are romantic and hot.keep loving like this and you will be together forever.
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Come on Queen, loose your feathers and let the magic flow, I know you can do it. You can do anything you put your mind to. I'll be waiting for your sensual love poem coming soon. Thanks for your comments to my poem and your applause. Yes, a great time was had by all. Avril
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Now that is one hot poem. Sounds like a great time was had by all Perfect flow throughout the poem. Im chicken to write a poem like this You make it look so good.
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Wattle, you always say the sweetest things. Of course if this were a movie, I would insist on the leading role so I can be up close and personal with my leading man Lol. As for my daughter, I feel pretty safe to say that she is not a big AP fan and only reads my poems if I ask her too. Thanks again Eric, you comments have lifted my tired soul. Avril
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Your words are so sweet Timothy and gives such encouragement. We definitely have a deal and thank you for reading me and wishing us both the best. All my love, Avril
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LOL! You're so funny, I'm LMAO from your comments and I'm really happy that you enjoyed my write and it's great it brought out the kinkiness in you, now you can share it with your significant other while you're both listening to a Quietstorm. Avril
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Hello Nicole92st, I am pleased you would have me join your group, "Girls In Love" which sounds like a wonderful group to be a part of. I will consider it greatly and get back to you ASAP. Thank you for your sincere comments to my poem. All my best to you, Avril
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good stuff
oooooh get it hot up in here....Somebody has Quietstorm on the mind in rewind...Turn off the lights...turn 'em off! I enjoyed your rhyme scheme that went down the letters because, me being a kinky dude, throught about the 'alphabet' during foreplay, and said, hmmmm she got it goin' on...Good grownfolk love sharing without being too obvious and graphic...that's classy, that's cosmopolitan, that's groovy...
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wow-join!
great poem!!! WOW. You are a realy really good poet! We are starting a group for girls in love. It really guves us gals a chance to express our feelings to other girls who can help and give advise to solve your problems. Even if it is a really difficult problem we still give our imput and advise for you. We really try to help you. We could really use someone like you in our group. It is really good. You should take a look at it. please.It is tittled GIRLS IN LOVE! Just view my homepage and take a look at it. you won't be sorry, I promise!
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Ms Diamond, you have such a gift – this poem is so tasteful. – If it were made into a movie, it could easily have the leading lady prancing around a pole in one of those joint for dis-functional men. Yet, your write is a treasure of passionate eloquence grown from romantic trust and intent. ---- Although I must confess: – I’m quite sure when your daughter finds this all those talks you have given her are going to have to be revised (somehow) ---- thank you Avril – you are a joy to read. (What a luck man he is).
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Perfect Pen!
Such a sweet heart you have full of passion that beats tender and true for the one who holds you through the nights, and the one who gently caresses you!
How beautiful love is, and being in love...and I only wish the best for you two, and I love this piece, the way it flowed like the river, and streams within thee.
Please pen on, and I'll read ya, deal!?!
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Thank you Joan, you are so sweet, we love you too dearly. Avril
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Oh my sweet Avril, such a wonderful declaration of love, my sweet you know how happy I am for the two of you,to find such a wonderful love, wonderful~love you both dearly~Love~Joan
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brilliant a masterpiece
This is so great. The rhythm and rhyme is absolutly brilliant. You have created a lovers masterpiece and it has blown me away. I think that you have actually capturd the rhythm of two lovers hearts beating as a single tune and then put it onto paper.
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