Sometimes we find ourselves
hoping and praying for love.
Praying that someone will open
their hearts to us.
We have the whole thing figured out.
We have the whole thing planned.
From the way we'd yearn to kiss them,
to the holding of hands.
When love finds it's way to us,
after we spend so many nights praying for it.
Won't know true love if we seen it,
so we tend to look right through it.
Seeking what's right in front of us,
we let real love slip right on by.
We clang on the the bull shit.
We done fell for some gamers lies.
While silently true love cries,
for the one they could have grown to love,
but their chance got denied.
When are we going to open our eyes
and stop selling ourselves short?
When will we learn to settle only for what we need?
Not what we think we want.
If you stop thinking with your eyes
and learn to control your hormones
Then you'll realize,
sex is nothing compared to making love.
Nope not even close.
Sex is something that you can share with a stranger.
Making love includes the mind the heart and the mental.
So if you are not ready for love
state that in the beginning.
That way their won't be any misunderstanding or mixed emotions.
We'll know we're just friends.
Author notes
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Written December 4th, 2004
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Excellet write.
You did a very good job on this. I shall give you clappy hands. lol
Tot Ziens,
Adam -
Come and spend some time with me here in the wilderness... and you will be ready to accept anything that isn't covered in body hair over 25% of their body... girl. I can set you up in a reality structure where you will apreciate even your nightmares when it comes to eye candy in the local male pool. Lord... if you only knew how much worse it can get. Don't worry... be happy!
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Be honest to your heart
Friends with Benefits sometimes that is the best thing! But damn I miss making love, that is the best feeling ever.
Excellent write beautiful
and 
LOVE YOU,
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I like this, I do. I'm not going to snap about the sex thing, as it's one of my pet peeves that i hate the words making love. Extremely. In the sense of complete revulsion. Anyways! good poem, sorry for that ranty bit of this comment. Good rhythm.
Jade -
Very nice!
Tell it like it is girly! Guesss what?? I tried the rap
thingy with this poem. It sounds much better when you rap it!
Hehehehehe Very nice!
Yertweetyness
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There are a few lines it gets caught up on, but overall it is good. Make sure your poems don't become prose, though, lol. Say what you feel, sure but keep from making it into conversation. I have the same problem sometimes >_>
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A good point. It has a nice flow and a consistent tone, a fun read. I especially liked the part "Won't know true love if we seen it,
so we tend to look right through it.
Seeking what's right in front of us,
we let real love slip right on by.
We clang on the the bull shit." -
I liked this and your comments are justified and fair one thing though 5th line up rather than 'mental' could you write soul or something I just think it would flow better I could be wrong and you are welcome to disagree but just think it might work better otherwise a great piece of writing well done and keep it up x
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