Sitting in the gutter,
a false reflection of faith and truth.
A horrid scented rainbow,
reflecting the sorrow of long lost youth.
A furrowed wrinkle on your brow,
gives out an aura of knowledge through age.
A youth full brightness in your eye,
shows that you hide a humbled rage.
Rage on you servant to those beyond,
push forth to lighten your selfish plight.
Huff on you bitter coward, fool,
your selfish ways'll bring no delight.
Author notes
Written December 4th, 2004
A contest entry
- ANYTHING!!!!!!!!!!^_^ by Tetsuka.
305 points, ended December 10, 2004, 11 entries
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Yes, I do love the rhyming...and the horrid scented rainbow, wow this gives me a reality to the hopes and happiness the rain and sunshine supposedly brings, like a jaded understanding of city life, a homeless man. Great job.
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This was great. Excellent. Wonderful. I loved it. And I glanced over your authors page, haha, you're a funny guy. Keep writing and have a happy holiday season!
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Wonderful writing with a very bold message. It's hard enough to be yourself when you are actually trying to. Good poem. Hugs, Patricia
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This is not only excellent writing but it also delivers a strong message. We can hide nothing, for in some way we reveal it to the world, even if unintentionally. Good luck in the contest!
BonnieQ
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Amazing. The rhyming was so perfect! And the whole meaning was truly neat. Good luck in the contest; you have a lot of talent. Keep writing!
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W00!! RYMING! Love the flow and repetion of some repeated words! No negative comment. Good luck.
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