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Offering (ghazal #61)


I trudge now back through this grime for you
Because it may ease the climb for you.

Because you just might learn from my pain,
I re-walk that bitter rime for you.

I’m told there are riches deep within,
So I search this fetid slime for you.

I seek rubies in the cave of loss,
Yet I’m glad to spend the time for you.

The earth and stars all could have been mine,
But I’ve passed these chances prime for you.

I’ll peel the rind and my soul expose,
Then wait as a silent mime for you.

Pearls were buried with my heart, you see,
So I dig back through the lime for you.

If in your depths these words resonate,
Zahhar is sounding a chime for you.

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to learn more about the ghazal: allpoetry.com/Column/784848/all=1
Written June 29th, 2002

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  • Kay Laon Anders
    February 15, 2006
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    Genious

    Go Zahhar! He's the man! I am sorry that name is just so freaking awesome! You have this under spiritual and hope but I felt love in this one also.... alot of it! Anyway this was a tad bit differnt from what I am use to seeing from your stuff but I also understand this is from a earlier study of yours that has nothing to do with the trisect so it makes total sense.... great write and looking for another...

    KAY

  • QueenMaab gold member
    December 5, 2004
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    I thank you for trudging through the sludge of learning how to write poetry for the reader to see what true poetry is. I didn't understand where you were coming from in the ghazal until I read the title and chatted it out a bit. Well done m'love.
    ~Bezoar
  • Sky Pilot
    December 5, 2004
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    This was quite touching; to suffer for someone else's well being is perhaps one of the most noble acts one can ever commit. I noticed that every last word before the repeat phrase rhymed, and I was wondering if that's a personal, artistic touch, or something every 'real' ghazal has?

  • Harpagonis
    December 4, 2004
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    Awesome. Every time I see one of your works, I'm introduced to yet another type of poetry I've never seen before. That's really fantastic. In addition to this, the column you wrote on the ghazal was very helpful in understanding this poem. Thanks for another splendid work.