In through the surf, and over the sand dunes
Where green meets the rain; as the birds migrate
Here for the winter fish stork, crane, and loons
Out to find love, and then to procreate.
Fish shimmer in shallows, frogs croak the blues
From sunrise to sunset, nature plays out
The simple formula behind life's truths,
And what conservation is all about.
Periwinkle sky above dark waters
Forest green clashes under cloudless views
Every thing cycles, everything matters
Whether or not you are blind to these hues.
All of God's creatures deserve their own home
Before it is gone, and only in poems.
Author notes
Silver Grasses
Well, where to begin? Most know that
A. I hate wet socks, birds, and swamps
b. Sonnets aren't my strong form
c. Rarely do I care about such drivel
This is extremely out of the box for horus8
Because, he's really a wretched monster.
And this poem is full of such conservative natural love
for things...
BLARG!
Written December 4th, 2004
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an interesting write, i know that sonnets are not ur strong point and this most definitely is out of the norm for u but i have to say i like the feel of it.. it sayds a little about twho u really are.... U are a bit of a dark horse really.....lol take care babes and thanx for sharing this one very informative...........
hugs and love Linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Well to tell you the truth I foud nthis to be very good. I loveed the last line on hwo the whole poem is describing on all of the different things that are out in nature. Yet at the end it shares that they may be only in poems in the end. Interesting write I liked it.^^
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Well Kevin, it's not the first time anyone has ever fallen for my sarcasm.
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First time anyone ever called me wise. There really is a lot about your poem I like and admire. I try not to blow my own trumpet, but you might like to look at my poem "Sonnet on Shrimps" and "dinghy sailing" other nature sonnets, or at least by inference celebrating the creation..
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Yes, you don't, you're not an animal YOU'RE A HUMAN, so much wiser.
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There is a lot of this sonnet I like very much - the theme, the richness of imagry. Wetlands are turely magical places and you bring that fact to life. But "home" and "poems" is not, for me an acceptable rhyme. And do animals really fall in love? (I dunno)
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Wonderful imagery of wetlands. It gives one the feeling that the wildlife are having coversation with each other. This flows so easily off the tongue, nice and smooth. I do love your color choice of periwinkle blue and forest green. It creates a wonderfully striking image of the wetlands. Beautifully crafted. Thank you for sharing.
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Wonderfully written and in excellent form. I always loved how nature and sonnets seemed to flow together so very well. The imagry was wonderful. Keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
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great sonnet with some fresh imagery and strong message...well written, good luck in the contest.
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A generally strong poem with some intresting ideas , i am a big fan of sonnets and this is a very good one i like it alot , i love the use of colours and the description like shimmer , its very good and well written
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well written..and a nice ending. Ive become interesting in sonnets, lol, and this seems a prime example of one. Wonderful rhyme scheme..good write
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terrific piece, dealing with the conversation of nature. we so very much dwell in our little world forgetting our role as stewards
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When I am in UK I live in the Fens - and this is a wonderful reminder of Home - Albert.
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that's brilliant, some excellent lines in there. not sure what love has to do with procreation lol! But then, I haven't wanted to procreate yet. Has your new addition arrived? I remember you saying you were expecting, well, not you physically of course! Hope mother and child are very well and its you getting the sleepless nights and foul smelling shit under your fingernails!
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It's very nice sonnet... perfect rhyming and meter... I'm not good judging imabic meter.... so can't comment on that... the last line bugged me a bit... I scrathed my head so much and end up with splinters...lol... I also like this line very much "Whether or not you are blind to these hues" b'cos I'm a colourblind.... Good luck in the contest and thanx for sharing your talent with us.....
mina
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Very good
I really like "Where green meets the rain". However, to me, "Forest green clashes under cloudless views" makes me think the same thing over again. Maybe it's just the word "Green". However, they are both brilliant lines. Great piece. -
this was a good one... nice ending! Your imagery in this made me think of everything you were trying to say. wonderful.
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Lovely
Lovely....how true. The images painted here signify a change in the times... these wetlands are on the decline sadly
Great poem, good luck in the contest 
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In through the surf, and over the sand dunes
Where green meets the rain; As the birds migrate
Here for the winter fish stork, crane, and loons
Out to find love, and then to procreate.
WONDERFUL THEME!!!
what a beautiful poem! i can cleary picture the scene with your well worded imagery.WOW!keep writing
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strong ending - excellent beginning. Loved the imagery and the punch message you had. Reminded me of a children's story I wrote for my writer's class! well done
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