She moves slowly along her highway
innocent and unsure,
afraid of the unknown.
She continues to move forward,
but quickly loses the ground
she has just managed to gain.
Frustration claws at her;
silent tears begin to fill her eyes.
She looks back at the pictures
that paint her past,
both the good times and the bad
then looks ahead to the white world before her;
a blank canvas on which her future
will be painted.
She longs to turn back to the past
to seek comfort and reassurance
in the world she has fought hard to build
where she knows she will find acceptance,
love and security.
But something pushes her on
challenges her to face the future
and leave her mark on a new canvas,
start a new page in her life
one which she can look back on someday.
She turns back to the white world with determination
and continues to walk.
Author notes
Haven't written in awhile.. this one's interesting, let me know what you think.
Written December 3rd, 2004
A contest entry
- For Those With 4 Or Less Trophies by masked man.
300 points, ended January 21, 2005, 23 entries
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WOW!!! Thats all i have to say!
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very nice, i like the whole blank canvas metaphor,really good.
i totally feel like life is like that, and your painting the picture. i think mine would be very abstract with parts of vibrent color and horrible monsters. -
I got some amazing imagery in this piece! And it really is something I can relate to..I have a fear of change, and I do find comfort in familiar things..Sometimes it is the wiser idea to take that step ahead into the future..thanks for sharing this wonderful piece! Keep up the great work!
-Lis
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hey you. omg i love this poem bex, i can relate to it sooo much right now, the way you emphasized the importance of the girls past, but also her excitement for the future, and her apprehensiveness as well. your an amazing writer, u know that, and you know how much i love reading your stuff. these past 4 years youve been an amazing friend to me, and i love you for it! see you tmrw night at our vball party
love ya
cate -
Hey you, don't know how I missed this. I'm with Malzy though, I like this, probably because it's so often true. It's what we have to do if we chose life. Great thoughts - this one makes so much sense. Paul
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Hm,
I was surprised when I saw you had a poem posted, I enjoy your work very much so. Sometimes its hard to believe youre so young because your poems are so filled with emotion and just the way you write its always a pleasure to read. And the subjects of your poems, youre always the one who can put words to what everyones been trying to say but failed. Dealing with what Ive been dealing with lately I can say this poem applies to me in so many ways. Good job as always sweetie.
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