Time flies behind in fading shades
That dance awhile upon the wind
Like children deep in forest glades
All men in bygone times to bind.
A time when I still happy lay
Before the tides of time had turned
And hurled down the joys of May
The ships of youth have all been burned.
Author notes
Written March 11th, 2004
A contest entry
- Your Best Piece of Work by mynameisnoone.
300 points, ended December 11, 2004, 51 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Excellent job
Well written as it does indeed remind us that time will slip away from us as we loose our childhood days in a physical sense. Nothing can replace our shild as you have described and it is the thoughts we carry that keep us happy. -
this is truely a great piece one of the best i have read in awhile short and sweet and gets right to the point you express your feelings well through your work and thats what make poetry so so beautiful because you put your heart into it.. Excellent work! Love always and forever...
~Kerri -
This is a great poem. It really is thought-provoking, and it put some really clear images in my head of kids enjoying their youth. Keep it up.
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Good Piece
Anything short is always preferable, especially on days such as these, when all is as it is. I thank you for this piece and hope you will continue writing such lovely and terse poems, for you express your feelings exceptionally well in them. Keep up the good work. -
this is deep and thought provoking, i like your choice of words..'The ships of youth have all been burned' that is such a descriptive line. nicely done, thanks for sharing
Shanelle -
That was a fair piece. I'm not sure I could understand your message. Was there one? The words kind of tripped over each other. Fair write though!
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I like this a lot, the imagry was awesome and your metaphor of the burning ships of youth were really intriguing.
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short, but it hit right at home, a real good write in my eyes... great job
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This was well written....The flow was superb!!
GREAT JOB!! and best of luck to you in the contest!
Melanie -
Very interesting indeed. Speaks to me of olden times, way back years ago. The formation of your words are lovely, for example, "A time when I still happy lay", I really liked that.
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great
this is a wonderfully written piece of poetry. great voice, and rhthym to it also. very deep, which is good, i like deep poems, that means that they mean something to you. keep it up! -
This piece is wonderfully deep and demonstrates a great deal of honed talent. Good luck in the contest!
BonnieQ
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Wow. Wow. Wow. I really enjoyed this poem. Although it was short, this is one of the best poems I have read on All Poetry. Keep writing; I am intrigued to read more of your work!
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Cool that.
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it was an intentional slant in the rhyme.
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I really liked this poem. I'm not sure about rhyming Wind with Bind, but I like it none the less. Good job!
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Beautiful
I ABSOLUTLY LOVED THIS!!!!! I seriously hope you win because your talent flows out of this masterpiece that you have given.
"Time flies behind in fading shades
That dance awhile upon the wind"
The beauty in this poem is incredible
I really enjoyed reading this
Keep up your magnificent work
~Mercy
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very good
I really liked this, your imagery, your simile and how you wrote about youth as a ship was very cool. Also good job on the rhyming. I have a lot of trouble with that myself it's not easy. Overall I enjoyed this -
i was like 15 minutes after. anyway, though, i saw that and it was the most amazing coincidence ever. i really got a kick out of it. maybe just for that we might both get a gold medal . . .
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holy croly what are you my twin?! I mean...1. you have the exact same background as me with the example say color of font and 2. You used May in your poem! Lol....this was really good. Keep it up. OO yeah and 3. You were about seconds after or before me...I dunno which lol.
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Well it's short but i LOVE RYMING! you rymed on everyother line that is very good and full of inspiring talent!On the negative side i couldn't get much of your message but it was still good no poetry is bad to me. ^_^ good luck!
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